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      jdubz @Kaela McCoy last edited by

      @Kaela-McCoy Thanks for the feedback! How does the ladder look to you? Does it look natural or weird?

      Josh White
      https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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      • Carrie
        Carrie last edited by

        I love this perspective and the reflection of color from the water on the diver's face. Very nice!

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        • Kaela McCoy
          Kaela McCoy @jdubz last edited by

          @jdubz It definitely looks in perspective to me! Nothing about it really stood out to me as being off. But I suppose, realistically, it would have some handrails and a sturdy platform like the picture here! But I wouldn't want the ladder to take away from everything else in your drawing, though. Personally, I like it as-is. abeb7d69-bb1d-424c-8438-85df186999ed-image.png

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            jdubz last edited by

            Awesome thanks I appreciate it!

            @Kaela-McCoy what's so funny is thinking back to when I was a kid how much less safe everything was back in the 80s even (at least where we lived lol). I remember the "high dive" which was probably really only maybe 12 feet but it felt so high up to us. It had no railings, just steps to the top board and there were these side-grip-like things just to hold on to before you jumped.

            I'm going to try and carve some time out today to start blocking this in on the final size.

            Josh White
            https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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            • TessaW
              TessaW last edited by

              This is so fun! Brings back childhood memories of renting out the local pool for parties at night. I was a kid in the 80s/90s and I remember the design of your current diving board. 😛 I'm wondering what a little bit of a directional splash would look like coming from either side, close to the corners? Just a little one, similar to what you have going on under the left hand.

              Great job!

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                jdubz @TessaW last edited by

                @TessaW That's a good suggestion, I'll work on trying to incorporate that in the larger version.

                Josh White
                https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                  chrisaakins last edited by

                  @jdubz this is looking great. Her face is gonna hurt in a few minutes.

                  Chris Akins
                  www.chrisakinsart.com
                  www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                    jdubz @chrisaakins last edited by

                    @chrisaakins said in Nightfall WIP Feedback Request:

                    Her face is gonna hurt in a few minutes.

                    This is true 😃

                    Josh White
                    https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                      jdubz last edited by

                      Put together the final size and I'm almost there. Blocked in the colors yesterday and then worked on the lighting this morning.

                      I've got some clean up to do and a few more details. And then I'll try and mess with contrast and some color balance and maybe a texture for the final.

                      Can you guys please critique me on something specific? On the last few critiques I've got, a consistent theme is that my foreground details are a bit "ham fisted". Really not sure how to address that because I was purposely not trying to over illustrate and detract from the focal point. But it sounds like that wasn't the right approach, so I'm really trying to be intentional about not doing that and spent a lot more time on those front details.

                      Any feedback would be appreciated!

                      final-v1.jpg

                      Josh White
                      https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                      • chrisaakins
                        chrisaakins @jdubz last edited by

                        @jdubz my only concern is her hand. Her wrist almost looks broken. But I also like it because it looks like its flapping in the wind. I think it wors overall but some people may not like it.

                        Chris Akins
                        www.chrisakinsart.com
                        www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                          jdubz @chrisaakins last edited by

                          @chrisaakins The one on the right you mean? I bet pivoting it to the right might solve that even if it's just a little.

                          Josh White
                          https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                            chrisaakins @jdubz last edited by

                            @jdubz the arm closet to the board.

                            Chris Akins
                            www.chrisakinsart.com
                            www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                              jdubz last edited by

                              Ok great thanks - I'll see how I can tweak it a bit!

                              Josh White
                              https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                                carlianne @jdubz last edited by

                                @jdubz I think the details look nicely balanced. If I were to add details it would be to your character at this point. It would also be really interesting to see you try texture. If you're interested Lee White has a YouTube video on how he does digital texture that's pretty great.

                                Also did you intentionally flip the moon so that the ends point away to the corner? I'm feeling a bit distracted by the moon like it's fighting to be a focal point. Might be because it's pointing away or too big or too bright? Just something to look at.

                                Overall it's looking really nice and polished! Kinda wonky in a fun and intentional way 😊

                                Check out my art and tutorials :)

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                                  Kevin Longueil SVS OG @jdubz last edited by Kevin Longueil

                                  @jdubz Hey Josh - this is looking cool - i loved your January Piece!! super nice - you are way better with color than i am so i hope you will forgive my crude attempt but i did have a couple things that would be easier if i tried to show them - i think that this would be a 3 point perspective is the main thing - i am sorry i am chiming in so late since you asked about the perspective a couple of times - i really feel like the eye level is so low it would have to be three point and the diving figure seems to be drawn in three point also - tilting the ladder dramatically back seems to do the trick - was also wondering what it would look like with less action besides the diver and no moon too - the the moon is so commanding it is hard to look away from it - lastly i was wondering about lighting the bottom of the face and the top differently might be cool thing to do on this piece - my attempt is quick and not too well done but i think it does seem interesting - anyways...could be wrong on this stuff..very nice piece 🙂

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                                    jdubz last edited by

                                    @Kevin-Longueil Thanks for the feedback Kevin, I appreciate it! I'll see what I can do to the ladder. My main initial idea is I wanted it to feel a lot higher. Maybe I can try and fold it back a bit. You might be right about the moon.

                                    @carlianne Yeah I did intentionally switch the moon because I was thinking the light from the sun wouldn't be reflected on the other side. Maybe that's detracting and it's less important to be accurate?

                                    I think I've seen that same video from Lee about texture and I've got a huge amount of textures I can play with. I use it a lot in my day job, so maybe that's why I'm resisting use it a lot here hah.

                                    Josh White
                                    https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                                      jdubz last edited by

                                      @carlianne moon-v3.jpg

                                      Maybe just a super diminished moon comparatively that's turned back around so it points back to her?

                                      Josh White
                                      https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                                      • Braxton
                                        Braxton last edited by

                                        This is such a fun image! Personally, I like the smaller moon, but taking out the ladder/diving board and other characters makes the image a little less fun for me. It also feels more about that one character, as opposed to a whole story, so I suppose it depends on what you're going for from a narrative point of view.

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                                        • carlianne
                                          carlianne @jdubz last edited by

                                          @jdubz yeah that doesn't distract me!
                                          And I know what you mean about not wanting to do what you do at your day job. I don't get to use any texture at my day job so I do soooo much of it in my personal work 😂

                                          Check out my art and tutorials :)

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                                            jdubz last edited by

                                            I've reworked a number of things so far just to see how it feels. I definitely agree with pushing that ladder back. I experimented with some ideas that didn't require a total redesign of that side, and I think I got something that's pretty good - the ladder and the boy on the 2nd board now intersect so it's a bit more interesting and less busy at the same time.

                                            I also cropped the image significantly, moved her down, diminished the moon and flipped it back over. My hope is that is helps you keep your eye in the middle as you look around - whether I was successful or not I don't know lol.

                                            Lastly I fixed her hand so hopefully it doesn't look too janky 😛 I also detailed her some more and added a good amount, and polished it with a few texture options from straight up canvas to this one here which was a bit more interesting and I liked how it accentuated the colors.

                                            Does this seem too much??

                                            final-v4.jpg

                                            Josh White
                                            https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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