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      aprilshin @Guest last edited by

      @carolinebautista Thank you, Caroline! I like #2, and I put a shirt on her and I like it better, haha. I see what you mean by scale for the first one. I drew cleaner versions for each and I added a chimney and tiny roof tiles for #1; hopefully that's enough?

      Some problems I'm having: I'm unsure how I should draw the tiny people in #3 so that it matches the style of the house-person. And I'm still struggling with composition overall. I tend to put everything dead center, but I'm not sure how to change it up. 😞 Maybe I didn't explore enough options during my thumbnails.

      I appreciate your input! Thank you again!

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        ArtofAleksey @aprilshin last edited by

        @aprilshin #3 is the only one of these that has a strong sense of story telling

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          aprilshin @ArtofAleksey last edited by

          @ArtofAleksey Thank you, Aleksey! It appears that #3 is the clear winner. Thanks so much for your help! 😃

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            teresaro last edited by

            I actually prefer both 1 and 4 for concepts. Although they’d need a bit of work because in 1 she looks happy reading her books, in which case why is she feeling so tight inside? And in 4 he looks like a sad and lonely giant so maybe you could illustrate the isolation factor in a clearer way to explain why he’s so sad. Like people in a distance maybe?

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              aprilshin @teresaro last edited by

              @teresaro Thank you for your feedback, Teresa! I redrew a couple of them to try to convey a story and added value. But... I'm not sure that it's any better.

              I feel like I'm getting more confused/discouraged the longer I spend on these. I think maybe I'm moving onto the next steps too quickly? Perhaps I need to go back to thumbnailing while focusing on storytelling. Or maybe I just need to take a break 😛

              Thanks, everyone, for your feedback! I'm going to sleep and see if I can do better tomorrow.

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                Braxton last edited by Braxton

                I actually quite like number 1...to me it communicates that isolating can actually feel nhice and cozy for us introverts sometimes (as long as you have a dog and some books). It reminds a little of this illustration

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                  A Former User @aprilshin last edited by A Former User

                  @aprilshin For the process Lee White explained, I don't do 50 thumbnails of different concepts, I usually choose a concept and zoom around to try out different camera angles. When I get more comfortable with doing that many thumbnails, I will hopefully be able to add more concepts in at the beginning and be able to choose better or go between them, but I still have this feeling like I can't do that many, so will keep doing thumbnails with a very narrow focus. Sometimes this doesn't work, but sometimes it's exactly what I need to push beyond putting each different concept in the center.

                  In the editorial illustration class, James Yang had more of a process like this, where he thumbnailed different concepts and chose one and then painted it. Your process might be like that too, but it does seem like he just knows already what will work in his very abstract style. That's the kind of thing I can't know yet, so I have to leave a lot more room to explore.

                  If you do more thumbnails of #3, for instance, you might try out the pov of the people on the ground looking up, and although you may not ever choose that one, trying out a crazy pov may help you add what you need to the original composition to strengthen the concept, or it may help you know how you want to draw the people really small. Each exploration will have a different feeling, so I try to choose the pov with the feeling I want to convey.

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                    Braxton @Guest last edited by

                    @carolinebautista Could you point me to where Lee White explains his process? I feel like I've heard bits and pieces of it but not the whole thing.

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                      A Former User @Braxton last edited by

                      @Braxton Here's the video about the process he uses, where he outlines the steps: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h6u_g0RPiCA

                      He got questions about how to do thumbnails from that video so he did another one on thumbnails: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jghVE4V5FfU

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                        Braxton @Guest last edited by Braxton

                        @carolinebautista thanks! One thing I've been struggling with a bit, is when I make initial thumbnails it feels like I'm trying to work out the basic idea at the same time as figuring out the composition, and trying to do both things simultaneously is difficult for me.

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                          aprilshin @Braxton last edited by

                          @Braxton I do the same thing! I guess maybe I need to spend more time in the research phase. Maybe my “thumbnails” were actually just my way of exploring ideas, and once I narrow it down to a single idea, then that’s when I dive deeper with 50 thumbnails exploring that one idea.

                          Thank you @carolinebautista for explaining how you do it! I think I need to review Lee’s 50 thumbnails video, too. Thanks so much, everyone! ❤️

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                            aprilshin last edited by

                            Okay, so I decided to work on #1 for now. I might end up working on all four this month. Here is my color study for the drawing. I picked colors from illustrations I liked by other artists, but it doesn't look nearly as great, and I'm not sure what I'm doing wrong. I did digress from my original value study because I got tired of putting the dark colors for the hair and pants every time, lol.

                            Does anyone see any glaring mistakes I'm making with color? Is there one that works better than the rest?

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                              aprilshin last edited by

                              More color studies. I think the latter half of this round was more successful because I started mixing my own colors using opacity. It feels more unified to me and I think I'm getting closer to finding the perfect colors, haha.

                              I pulled the original colors from a website: coolors.co if anyone is looking for color palette generators. It's pretty easy to use!

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                                aprilshin last edited by

                                Third round of color studies. I think what I didn't like about the 1st color study was that it was too dark/saturated. I know I'm starting to get less contrast, but maybe the contrast doesn't have to be so dramatic? I think I'm going to go with one from the previous set, though.

                                My next step is to make a clean sketch and then onto the final painting! I don't think I've ever put this much work into even a simple drawing like this, but I think the result will be much better than if I hadn't taken all the steps.

                                Any and all critiques are always welcome. Thank you!

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                                  aprilshin last edited by

                                  I ended up going with this color scheme. Here's the basic color. I'm thinking of having ambient light coming from the floor and the book.

                                  I also did more brainstorming today regarding the other thumbnails and how I can make them better, i.e. more storytelling. Thankful for the feedback! 🙂

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                                    aprilshin last edited by

                                    Here is the finished version for #1. Onto the next! 🙂

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                                      Elisheba @aprilshin last edited by

                                      @aprilshin Hey April! I was about to comment on your previous post where you asked about which colour palette is more appealing and this was the exact palette I was going to choose. But then I figured out that you had already finished your piece. This looks great!

                                      Elisheba

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                                        aprilshin @Elisheba last edited by

                                        @Elisheba Oh yay! Thanks for your input, Elisheba! ❤ ❤ ❤

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