Post-contest Help/Critique of my November Contest Entry
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@JoshuaDages yes that would help too.
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I agree with what’s been said already about contrast. Also Maybe you can find some sort of middle ground when it comes to outlining? If you’re wanting to get away from it but it’s also what you’re used to? Play around with your inking a little
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@JoshuaDages one critique I will add is that you almost never have a character's back to the viewer. (According to Jake and Will)
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@powsupermum Thanks! Yes, it's good to find that comfortable middle ground, even though it can be challenging to figure out.
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@chrisaakins Agreed! Working on it now. Thanks!
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Hi Joshua! The image is very sweet. I like the grandma character a lot.
I think the biggest improvement would be better value structure. Just more contrast and better silhoullettes, value consistency within bigger shapes, clear edges will help a lot. Comparing adjacent colors : is it darker/lighter , is it warmer / cooler color?
Maybe just thinking, what time of a day, weather and light condition you want, might help. And get reference for it if needed. To me it feels like there is a wet, foggy weather in the park, which doesnt corespond with the storybeat.
The limited color pallette is a nice idea, but the colors feel a bit incosistent for instance in the girls hair (i suspect you used red to attract more attention).
Some other ideas to try:
Some experimenting with poses (grandma's more opened arms; grandpa more next to grandma, maybe kneeing, waiting for hug...; the kids feet make quite a tangent there, just showing a little of girls face)?
Creating visually clearer path of running characters with big bush shapes?
Putting the grandparents characters a bit up hill with overexposed bloomed light behind them to make them more heroic?A little scribble to see what i mean
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Everyone else already said what I would have added
BUT didn't you do a really strong oz cover? I'm thinking I remember your oz cover and really loved it....was surprised it didn't make top 16! -
@marek-halko Again, thank you so much for taking the time to sketch out your ideas! I really love how you've changed the perspective and can also see what you mean about the colors (your color palette for your November piece was amazing, by the way).
I will continue to work on this piece and am excited to take into account all of your notes. Thanks again!
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@Coley Thank you for your kind words about my Oz cover. I am very proud of that one as well and have added the updated version to my portfolio website!
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Hi @JoshuaDages
Here is my 2 cents
I really like your characters and art style.
I agree with my fellow artist.
I wanted to give you constructive feedback by respecting your art style and painting over your existing illustration.
wanted to show you color variations, warms vs cools, color variety, and by adding neutral colors, you could achieve a very fun color illustration.
I think your original color pallet was too monochromatic
I hope this was helpful.
Keep up the good work!!!
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@franksandovalart Thank you as well for the paint over! I like how bright it is and how it really helps the silhouettes. I also love the addition of the girl's headband to allow for her face to show up. I think that I will definitely add that into my new version. Thanks again!
