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    • Freya Chakour
      Freya Chakour @APHOTICMOTH last edited by

      @CLCanadyArts @HeatherBouteneff @jenithornhill @Thestyledare-Singh @Melissa-Bailey-0 @Judy-Elizabeth-Wilson

      First of all, thank you all so much for your feedback! this is really so helpful and so interesting to read how the piece is received so far and where the problems may lay. it helped me realize that its really difficult to navigate through the piece. also that the lines of the rollercoaster and the slightly tilted carousel make a super strong focal point in a place where nothing happens and its also the middle of the paper as well as the point where the river is going and parting the mountains. also I realized that I kind of divided the composition into a left and a right half.
      I tried out lot of changes, and came up with a new approach. sadly I had to remove the rollercoaster, because even smaller or more faded it leads the eye very strongly, as the only very industrial thing in the piece, to a point where I didn't want the viewers to look.

      so I made the scene a bit smaller, a bit more intimate I hope, and changed the oak into a big willow tree, also I added way more diagonal lines, and tried to fill up the middle of the piece a bit more.

      @miranda-hoover thank you so much for all of your ideas, I loved the one with the lantern, im thinking of creating a second piece in this direction, maybe a night or evening setting with lots of blues, and the rollercoaster, like a mini series with these characters or this world.

      @James-Toogood @Molambo thank you both a ton for your draw overs! I appreciate it very much and found it super helpful to see!

      https://www.instagram.com/fyra.c/
      Portfolio: https://www.artstation.com/fyrac

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      • Freya Chakour
        Freya Chakour last edited by

        A lot of changed later... this is where I am right now with this piece, I hope very much I could improve some of the points that where difficult about the former version and that it read better now.
        Would love to hear what you think.

        small - das karussel Kopie.jpg

        https://www.instagram.com/fyra.c/
        Portfolio: https://www.artstation.com/fyrac

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        • APHOTICMOTH
          APHOTICMOTH Moderator @Freya Chakour last edited by APHOTICMOTH

          @Freya-Chakour Oh, this is a nice start. Could be a nice book cover.Really beautiful.

          All my links: https://APHOTICMOTH.carrd.co/

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          • ?
            A Former User last edited by

            in term of readability and composition i think its better than the previous one.

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            • HeatherBouteneff
              HeatherBouteneff @Freya Chakour last edited by

              @Freya-Chakour great job! The lighting is so lovely especially the willow

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              • Freya Chakour
                Freya Chakour last edited by

                @CLCanadyArts @HeatherBouteneff thank you so much for your feedback :3 it is greatly appreciated and helped me a lot to hang on to this piece and finish it! I will post the final in a moment (still need to do some test printing and sometimes after seeing the print I go back and change a few things here and there, but for now I am happy with the result)

                https://www.instagram.com/fyra.c/
                Portfolio: https://www.artstation.com/fyrac

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                • Freya Chakour
                  Freya Chakour last edited by

                  soo that's the final! it was definitely a challenging piece for me, but also I learned a ton. Thank you all again for your feedback!

                  Unbenanntesby the lake small_Projekt 58.png

                  https://www.instagram.com/fyra.c/
                  Portfolio: https://www.artstation.com/fyrac

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                  • baileyvidler
                    baileyvidler last edited by

                    @Freya-Chakour This is gorgeous!! The textures and colors are magical.

                    Bailey Vidler
                    Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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                    • KayPotter
                      KayPotter @Freya Chakour last edited by

                      @Freya-Chakour
                      So beautiful, and makes me want to know more for sure. It was great to see your process and edits!

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                      • Jacy13
                        Jacy13 @Freya Chakour last edited by

                        @Freya-Chakour Amazing work! The colors are just perfect 😃

                        Deviantart: https://www.deviantart.com/jacy13
                        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/jacy13draws/?hl=en
                        Portfolio: https://jacy13.artstation.com/

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                        • SheerArt
                          SheerArt last edited by

                          Awesome!

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                          • APHOTICMOTH
                            APHOTICMOTH Moderator last edited by

                            It turned out so nice! Is the water nymph picking a bouquet for the elven girl? ❤ I love it.

                            All my links: https://APHOTICMOTH.carrd.co/

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                            • carlianne
                              carlianne @Freya Chakour last edited by

                              @Freya-Chakour you did such a fantastic job applying the feedback! It looks great ❤️

                              Check out my art and tutorials :)

                              Instagram: www.instagram.com/carliannecreates/

                              Youtube:
                              https://youtube.com/c/CarlianneCreates

                              Shop: www.carliannecreates.com

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                              • Freya Chakour
                                Freya Chakour last edited by

                                @baileyvidler @KayPotter @Jacy13 @SheerArt @carlianne thank you so much for your kind words! I apprechimade your words, feedback and support a lot!

                                @CLCanadyArts Thank you so much! Yeah I imagined something like that, I also had this idea that they are living somewhere in a house half underwater, half above the sea level, in a kind of shared apartment situation, that I hope to explore in a future illustration : )

                                https://www.instagram.com/fyra.c/
                                Portfolio: https://www.artstation.com/fyrac

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