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    My road race wips ^_^

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    • Meekipink
      Meekipink @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos Ohhhh, I love it!!! My only suggestion would be to adjust your lighting to emphasise the storytelling aspect - for example, reducing the brightness of the background. Right now I'm not exactly sure where to look, I'm drawn immediately to the blank spots on your path instead of your bunnies (the path has quite a high contrast compared to everything else). Maybe limit your brightest areas so it leads the eye where you want it to (e.g. the closest bunny and the finish line).

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @Meekipink last edited by

        @Meekipink thanks for the feedback😊 I think I like the the high contrast though, in my eyes it allows you follow along the path to each racer. But I appreciate your point of view!

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

          Ok so this is totally wild, I know, but I really wanted to do something that was completely nonsensical and whimsical wrapped up into one. Something that makes you do a double take, so I thought of this sort of dreamscape last night while trying to fall asleep, and viola! Is it too crazy? I’m also adding stars and other details to enhance the environment, which is of course what I’ve been focusing on. Let me know your thoughts!

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            • AngelinaKizz
              AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos oooh it's super cute, definitely whimsical, but I'm not getting rabbit road race.. it would be prefect in a dreamy scenario though!

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                Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                @AngelinaKizz it’s basically a dream here’s the rest of the concept
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                  Holumpa @Asyas_illos last edited by

                  @Asyas_illos Both pieces are gorgeous! I love the creativity in the second one and I admire your skills with environment/Background, such wonderful solutions.

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                    Eliana Bastidas last edited by

                    I like more the second option. Like I saw in previous comments, the characters are lost in the background a bit. In the second one it doesn’t happen.

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos @Holumpa last edited by

                      @Holumpa thank you so much I usually struggle with creative background ideas so I’m really pushing myself!

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                      • Asyas_illos
                        Asyas_illos last edited by

                        I highlighted the grass behind the main character a bit maybe that helps him pop out a little more?
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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                          Postin some progress😜
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                            AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos it's so good... I love it!

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                              Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                              @AngelinaKizz haha thanks

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                                Asyas_illos last edited by

                                Think I’m gonna sit on this for a couple days… feedback welcome!
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                                • AngelinaKizz
                                  AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                  @Asyas_illos I noticed one small thing, that when it's thumbnail sized, the bunny riding the carrot isn't as clear as I think he should be. His shirt dissipates into background, and the pink and orange seem to be of similar value (without doing a black and white flip).

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                                    Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                    @AngelinaKizz thanks! Yes since I have the light shining on them from the star it washes out the bunnies darker tone and I’ll look into darker colored pajamas options 😊

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                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      I think this helps a little.? I don’t want to bring them much darker cuz it will then become similar in value to her fur… maybe she should have no pajamas? Would it still appear she is dreaming?
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                                        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        @Asyas_illos I really like the changes you've made!

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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos last edited by

                                          Yep started another lol I’m from Northern California and live in the redwoods where we have a drive through tree, so this was inspired by that. Although these days you can probably only fit a vw bug or fiat through it. So my concept is one young bunny is too mesmerized by the giant trees he is being passed by the other runners. Thoughts?
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                                            Asyas_illos last edited by

                                            Update fitting characters into comp!

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