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    • von_Nimmermehr
      von_Nimmermehr last edited by

      Hey,
      i think the device looks quite nice, but i really have no clue how this two pictures go together. They also don't look like as if they belong together. Would love to read about yout thoughts.

      Website: www.von-Nimmermehr.com
      Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/von_nimmermehr_illustration/

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      • susanhowarth.art
        susanhowarth.art @Katherine last edited by

        @Katherine I really like your rendering style, especially the textures! But no, I don’t understand what’s going on.

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos last edited by

          I see it, the machine creates clouds. The cloud started a rainstorm inside and now the house is filling up with water. I love it I think they look cohesive as well I could see it in a book, with a spot illustration on one side and and the full bleed on the other. Nice work I’m sorry you didn’t get to enter your finished piece.

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Katherine i can’t get enough it’s so gorgeous

            Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
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            • Katherine
              Katherine @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos Congratulations Asya, you got it! 😆Gosh, you should probably get a prize or some such.And yes they are facing pages in a book.

              the site: katherinetyson.com
              instagram: instagram.com/katherinetysonart

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @Katherine last edited by

                @Katherine I love it seriously❤️

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                www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
                https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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                • ?
                  A Former User @Katherine last edited by

                  @Katherine Very lovely piece. Asyas explanation helped me understand the story. I love the story! I didn't immediately come to it though.

                  About the illustration, could you push the darks more around the creature so it has more of a silhouette?

                  Very lovely piece!

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                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Katherine last edited by

                    @Katherine Awesome! love it. My one critique might be the cloud. Maybe show it from the bottom up.

                    Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                    Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
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                    • Katherine
                      Katherine @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                      @von_Nimmermehr Thanks for the feedback — is it that the machine is in a different style to the rest of the illustration, that it doesn't look like it belongs?

                      the site: katherinetyson.com
                      instagram: instagram.com/katherinetysonart

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                      • Katherine
                        Katherine @susanhowarth.art last edited by

                        @susanhowarth-art Thanks Susan — the machine on the left is producing rain clouds and the characters are under water from all the raining inside 🙂

                        the site: katherinetyson.com
                        instagram: instagram.com/katherinetysonart

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                        • Katherine
                          Katherine @Asyas_illos last edited by

                          @Asyas_illos Thank you so much!!!

                          the site: katherinetyson.com
                          instagram: instagram.com/katherinetysonart

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                          • Katherine
                            Katherine @Guest last edited by

                            @Stephanie-H Thanks Stephanie — I see what you mean about the values. My problem was I had them all worked out then added that window at the last minute. Then I felt like I needed to make the creature's face darker to stand out against the window — but now it doesn't stand out against the wall!

                            the site: katherinetyson.com
                            instagram: instagram.com/katherinetysonart

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                            • Katherine
                              Katherine @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                              @Nyrryl-Cadiz I see what you mean about the cloud! I didn't bother drawing that bit in perspective and just eye-balled it. I've had another crack, using my vanishing points:

                              The Wish—Internet—Katherine Tyson.jpeg

                              the site: katherinetyson.com
                              instagram: instagram.com/katherinetysonart

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                              • kirsten-mcg
                                kirsten-mcg @Katherine last edited by kirsten-mcg

                                @Katherine I think this is one reason why stand alone prompts are so hard. In a book with a story, this illustration would totally make since, and the readers would get it immediately! But without text I was lost until I read @Asyas_illos comment. But still, the rendering and your story is lovely! And the rain from the cloud looks great now.

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                                • Kim Rosenlof
                                  Kim Rosenlof @Katherine last edited by

                                  @Katherine The style is great and I love the characters. I think the clouds look more like bubbles than clouds, and to produce that much water, I feel like there should be more clouds on the right side.

                                  Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kiminyrose/

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                                  • Pamela Fraley
                                    Pamela Fraley SVS OG last edited by

                                    I get it more now that I read all the comments. I’m still a little confused about the creature that’s with the girl under the water. But, I really love your style! I love the rendering and your values and just everything about how you draw. I think this is one of those that would make so much sense in the context of a book.

                                    instagram.com/fraleycreates

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                                    • Griffin McPherson
                                      Griffin McPherson @Katherine last edited by

                                      @Katherine so I get that this machine on the left is making clouds and I see that there’s a small cloud in the right image but otherwise these two sides feel disconnected. Is this supposed to be like we are looking at a spread in a picture book so we have the machine on one side and the flooded room on the other?

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