Cloud Critique Welcomed!

[Asyas_illos]

I see it, the machine creates clouds. The cloud started a rainstorm inside and now the house is filling up with water. I love it I think they look cohesive as well I could see it in a book, with a spot illustration on one side and and the full bleed on the other. Nice work I’m sorry you didn’t get to enter your finished piece.

[Asyas_illos]

@Katherine i can’t get enough it’s so gorgeous

[Katherine]

@Asyas_illos Congratulations Asya, you got it! Gosh, you should probably get a prize or some such.And yes they are facing pages in a book.

[Asyas_illos]

@Katherine I love it seriously️

[A Former User]

@Katherine Very lovely piece. Asyas explanation helped me understand the story. I love the story! I didn't immediately come to it though.

About the illustration, could you push the darks more around the creature so it has more of a silhouette?

Very lovely piece!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@Katherine Awesome! love it. My one critique might be the cloud. Maybe show it from the bottom up.

[Katherine]

@von_Nimmermehr Thanks for the feedback — is it that the machine is in a different style to the rest of the illustration, that it doesn't look like it belongs?

[Katherine]

@susanhowarth-art Thanks Susan — the machine on the left is producing rain clouds and the characters are under water from all the raining inside

[Katherine]

@Asyas_illos Thank you so much!!!

[Katherine]

@Stephanie-H Thanks Stephanie — I see what you mean about the values. My problem was I had them all worked out then added that window at the last minute. Then I felt like I needed to make the creature's face darker to stand out against the window — but now it doesn't stand out against the wall!

[Katherine]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz I see what you mean about the cloud! I didn't bother drawing that bit in perspective and just eye-balled it. I've had another crack, using my vanishing points:

[kirsten-mcg]

@Katherine I think this is one reason why stand alone prompts are so hard. In a book with a story, this illustration would totally make since, and the readers would get it immediately! But without text I was lost until I read @Asyas_illos comment. But still, the rendering and your story is lovely! And the rain from the cloud looks great now.

[Kim Rosenlof]

@Katherine The style is great and I love the characters. I think the clouds look more like bubbles than clouds, and to produce that much water, I feel like there should be more clouds on the right side.

[Pamela Fraley]

I get it more now that I read all the comments. I’m still a little confused about the creature that’s with the girl under the water. But, I really love your style! I love the rendering and your values and just everything about how you draw. I think this is one of those that would make so much sense in the context of a book.

[Griffin McPherson]

@Katherine so I get that this machine on the left is making clouds and I see that there’s a small cloud in the right image but otherwise these two sides feel disconnected. Is this supposed to be like we are looking at a spread in a picture book so we have the machine on one side and the flooded room on the other?