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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @Katherine last edited by

      @Katherine I love it seriously❤️

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        A Former User @Katherine last edited by

        @Katherine Very lovely piece. Asyas explanation helped me understand the story. I love the story! I didn't immediately come to it though.

        About the illustration, could you push the darks more around the creature so it has more of a silhouette?

        Very lovely piece!

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        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Katherine last edited by

          @Katherine Awesome! love it. My one critique might be the cloud. Maybe show it from the bottom up.

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          • Katherine
            Katherine @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

            @von_Nimmermehr Thanks for the feedback — is it that the machine is in a different style to the rest of the illustration, that it doesn't look like it belongs?

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            • Katherine
              Katherine @susanhowarth.art last edited by

              @susanhowarth-art Thanks Susan — the machine on the left is producing rain clouds and the characters are under water from all the raining inside 🙂

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              • Katherine
                Katherine @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos Thank you so much!!!

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                • Katherine
                  Katherine @Guest last edited by

                  @Stephanie-H Thanks Stephanie — I see what you mean about the values. My problem was I had them all worked out then added that window at the last minute. Then I felt like I needed to make the creature's face darker to stand out against the window — but now it doesn't stand out against the wall!

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                  • Katherine
                    Katherine @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                    @Nyrryl-Cadiz I see what you mean about the cloud! I didn't bother drawing that bit in perspective and just eye-balled it. I've had another crack, using my vanishing points:

                    The Wish—Internet—Katherine Tyson.jpeg

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                    • kirsten-mcg
                      kirsten-mcg @Katherine last edited by kirsten-mcg

                      @Katherine I think this is one reason why stand alone prompts are so hard. In a book with a story, this illustration would totally make since, and the readers would get it immediately! But without text I was lost until I read @Asyas_illos comment. But still, the rendering and your story is lovely! And the rain from the cloud looks great now.

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                      • Kim Rosenlof
                        Kim Rosenlof @Katherine last edited by

                        @Katherine The style is great and I love the characters. I think the clouds look more like bubbles than clouds, and to produce that much water, I feel like there should be more clouds on the right side.

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                        • Pamela Fraley
                          Pamela Fraley SVS OG last edited by

                          I get it more now that I read all the comments. I’m still a little confused about the creature that’s with the girl under the water. But, I really love your style! I love the rendering and your values and just everything about how you draw. I think this is one of those that would make so much sense in the context of a book.

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                          • Griffin McPherson
                            Griffin McPherson @Katherine last edited by

                            @Katherine so I get that this machine on the left is making clouds and I see that there’s a small cloud in the right image but otherwise these two sides feel disconnected. Is this supposed to be like we are looking at a spread in a picture book so we have the machine on one side and the flooded room on the other?

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