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    End of the line…wip ^_^

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    • Pamela Fraley
      Pamela Fraley SVS OG @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos I think I have the same problem because i signed my self up to do Novel writing November. I was also contemplating Folk Tale week on Instagram. Because, I have serious problems and want to do waaaaay too much. 😂

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos last edited by

        Some different gestures and character design
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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

          Ok so I decided to go a different route, I wanted to do another fantasy inspired illo like my dream rabbit road race and went with a literal end of the road let me know what your thoughts are on composition and story ( though there’s not much to it)😉
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          • Chantal Goetheer
            Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Asyas_illos I like the moon and stars and character flowering towards a big waterfall! It's interesting. The new beginning isn't clear to me however. Where does it all go? And what are they standing on? It doesn't seem star shaped and the moon is next to them.

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

              @Chantal-Goetheer the whole thing is meant to be very abstract. I was thinking some sort of raft or iceberg, maybe a boat that they’re on it’s not fully designed yet. And the new beginning is supposed to unknown to the viewer, I plan on lighting it down there to signify there’s something there, but what that is, is up to the viewers.

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos last edited by

                Think im finally on to something here let me know what your thoughts are on story now
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                • Chantal Goetheer
                  Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                  @Asyas_illos they seem to be both angels with those cute little wings. But then the end of the road is less clear to me. They could fly away? At first I didn't notice the wings on the dog and I figured he would be meeting an end of the road soon but he would have his Guardian Angel to watch his back whichever way it would turn out. Or maybe with them both having wings they are Guardian Angels waiting to be dropped to earth to help someone/a furry little friend.

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                    @Chantal-Goetheer sort of lol, so the child is more of an angelic ferryman, and he is escorting this angelpup to his new beginning, being his soul is recycled. Ok it was maybe more complicated than I thought.🧐

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                    • kirsten-mcg
                      kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @Asyas_illos I'm still having a little trouble understanding your concept for this one. I love the dream like quality of it though! Is there something you could do to make it a little more clear that the angel ferryman is escorting the pup to a new beginning? Maybe giving him something? Like some token of his new life?

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                      • Asyas_illos
                        Asyas_illos last edited by

                        Man you guys are killing me with this one! Ok I guess I need to rethink a bit🧐

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                        • Mia Clarke
                          Mia Clarke @Asyas_illos last edited by

                          @Asyas_illos 😌 If it's any consolation, I thought your warewolf concept was great. It also tied in with Kamari meaning moon, which I thought was a nice, subtle touch. Maybe go back to that one instead?

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                          • Kim Rosenlof
                            Kim Rosenlof @Mia Clarke last edited by

                            I agree with @Mia-Clarke. I thought the werewolf one was a good idea too, but it was hard for me to tell what was going on with the sketch you posted (not enough details). Once I understood what it was about, it made sense. Sorry, I should have said that sooner.

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                            • Chantal Goetheer
                              Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                              @Asyas_illos maybe you could try making the dog more ghost like as in glowing? The wings and halo of the kid is clearly saying angel to me. I could follow your explanation and I like it. Maybe what they travel in is his basket from home in which they buried him which may contain further clues to the story? I found the werewolf one very clever and clear. But this one is a bigger challenge. And why not do two?. Then you would have still slowed down. Last month you had a stunning three entries 😀.

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos last edited by

                                I appreciate all the feedback from everyone, that’s of course why we post right?
                                I will still work on the werewolf one as well as this one, hopefully I can make it work!

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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                                  Alright some of you might call this a cop out, but I used a sign. (Sighs) I know not always the way to go but I really love this one and I just could t figure out how to convey my story better, oh well. Also I’m thinking I want the child to be a cute child-friendly version of death, instead of angel. But that can be as easy as a wardrobe change if not.
                                  Anyway that’s where I’m at now…
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                                  • AngelinaKizz
                                    AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    @Asyas_illos I don't think your sign is the same as an in your face "reincarnation here" sign. I like that it makes you think about what it means.

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                                    • Chantal Goetheer
                                      Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      @Asyas_illos with the dog being more ghost and the kid dressed like that it is much clearer! I'm wondering if the sign is really needed, but it can give additional clues. I think you're going to make this one work.

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                                      • Chantal Goetheer
                                        Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        @Asyas_illos plus I like your textures

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                                        • Miriam
                                          Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by Miriam

                                          @Asyas_illos I like both of your ideas.

                                          I didn't get the werewolf one at first, since there wasn't a bite mark that I could see, but the finished version would have made that clear, so I think it would come across easily then.

                                          This angel pup one is really developing well.
                                          You might want to consider adding a scythe blade to the baby-angel-of-death's staff, unless you want to stay further away from the Grim Reaper. (I had to look up the difference between sickle and scythe to make sure I got the right one!)

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                                          (These are all scythes. The sickle is the curved one that was on the old USSR / Russian Flag.)

                                          Since you want him to be friendlier, you could also change the scythe to a shepherd's crook — or just stick with the current staff.

                                          The edge of the waterfall is very straight. Are you doing that to emphasize the "end of the road" concept?

                                          I agree with @AngelinaKizz that the recycle sign isn't the same as a written sign. And with @Chantal-Goetheer that you may not need it at all anymore. Either way, I think it works.

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                                          • Asyas_illos
                                            Asyas_illos @Miriam last edited by

                                            @Miriam I wasn’t sure I wanted to add that or not. I was thinking of ways I make it look like one without actually being one, like having a crow buddy who sits on the end. Also I wanted it doubling as his paddle stick or whatever they are called in Italy, to push the boats around? I guess we’ll see how it comes out, thanks for the feedback!😊

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