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    End of the line…wip ^_^

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    • kirsten-mcg
      kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos I'm still having a little trouble understanding your concept for this one. I love the dream like quality of it though! Is there something you could do to make it a little more clear that the angel ferryman is escorting the pup to a new beginning? Maybe giving him something? Like some token of his new life?

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos last edited by

        Man you guys are killing me with this one! Ok I guess I need to rethink a bit🧐

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        • Mia Clarke
          Mia Clarke @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @Asyas_illos 😌 If it's any consolation, I thought your warewolf concept was great. It also tied in with Kamari meaning moon, which I thought was a nice, subtle touch. Maybe go back to that one instead?

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          • Kim Rosenlof
            Kim Rosenlof @Mia Clarke last edited by

            I agree with @Mia-Clarke. I thought the werewolf one was a good idea too, but it was hard for me to tell what was going on with the sketch you posted (not enough details). Once I understood what it was about, it made sense. Sorry, I should have said that sooner.

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            • Chantal Goetheer
              Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos maybe you could try making the dog more ghost like as in glowing? The wings and halo of the kid is clearly saying angel to me. I could follow your explanation and I like it. Maybe what they travel in is his basket from home in which they buried him which may contain further clues to the story? I found the werewolf one very clever and clear. But this one is a bigger challenge. And why not do two?. Then you would have still slowed down. Last month you had a stunning three entries 😀.

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos last edited by

                I appreciate all the feedback from everyone, that’s of course why we post right?
                I will still work on the werewolf one as well as this one, hopefully I can make it work!

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                  Alright some of you might call this a cop out, but I used a sign. (Sighs) I know not always the way to go but I really love this one and I just could t figure out how to convey my story better, oh well. Also I’m thinking I want the child to be a cute child-friendly version of death, instead of angel. But that can be as easy as a wardrobe change if not.
                  Anyway that’s where I’m at now…
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                  • AngelinaKizz
                    AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos I don't think your sign is the same as an in your face "reincarnation here" sign. I like that it makes you think about what it means.

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                    • Chantal Goetheer
                      Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @Asyas_illos with the dog being more ghost and the kid dressed like that it is much clearer! I'm wondering if the sign is really needed, but it can give additional clues. I think you're going to make this one work.

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                      • Chantal Goetheer
                        Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos plus I like your textures

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                        • Miriam
                          Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by Miriam

                          @Asyas_illos I like both of your ideas.

                          I didn't get the werewolf one at first, since there wasn't a bite mark that I could see, but the finished version would have made that clear, so I think it would come across easily then.

                          This angel pup one is really developing well.
                          You might want to consider adding a scythe blade to the baby-angel-of-death's staff, unless you want to stay further away from the Grim Reaper. (I had to look up the difference between sickle and scythe to make sure I got the right one!)

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                          (These are all scythes. The sickle is the curved one that was on the old USSR / Russian Flag.)

                          Since you want him to be friendlier, you could also change the scythe to a shepherd's crook — or just stick with the current staff.

                          The edge of the waterfall is very straight. Are you doing that to emphasize the "end of the road" concept?

                          I agree with @AngelinaKizz that the recycle sign isn't the same as a written sign. And with @Chantal-Goetheer that you may not need it at all anymore. Either way, I think it works.

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                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos @Miriam last edited by

                            @Miriam I wasn’t sure I wanted to add that or not. I was thinking of ways I make it look like one without actually being one, like having a crow buddy who sits on the end. Also I wanted it doubling as his paddle stick or whatever they are called in Italy, to push the boats around? I guess we’ll see how it comes out, thanks for the feedback!😊

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                            • Miriam
                              Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by Miriam

                              @Asyas_illos According to a Google search leading to https://adventure.howstuffworks.com/gondola2.htm, they are paddles (which is necessary where the water is deeper).

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos @Miriam last edited by

                                @Miriam oh nice, good to know! Thanks for checking that out😃

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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos last edited by

                                  Gonna sit on this for a bit while work on the other…
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                                  • beccabee_draws
                                    beccabee_draws @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    @Asyas_illos I totally got that! At the first one I was thinking they were coming to the edge of the world, but then with the stars and moon and stuff I wasn't sure...
                                    But with the angel wings and stuff right away I was thinking, "Did they pass away? Or one of them?" But they look happy... but then they're right beside this precipice... kind of looks like they're about to fall off something, maybe needs something to show that it isn't them falling off into oblivion? That it's a good thing, that they're falling into a new beginning like you mentioned? Up to you. It is a little complex but I love it.

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                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos @beccabee_draws last edited by

                                      @beccabee_draws thank you, yes it turned out to a lot more complex than I originally thought, hopefully one of the judges will understand the symbology and concept.

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                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        Darker or lighter?
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                                        • AngelinaKizz
                                          AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                          @Asyas_illos I am drawn more to the lighter version!

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                                          • Asyas_illos
                                            Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                            @AngelinaKizz thanks, knowing the prompt, do you think the sign is necessary? I know to someone unaware of the prompt, they would likely need explanation.

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