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    • kayleenartlover
      kayleenartlover @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos I would save the bird part for a different scene. Maybe during a rain shower.

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      • kayleenartlover
        kayleenartlover @Asyas_illos last edited by

        @Asyas_illos If you squint or make the picture small the mouse blends in with the background a bit, which is probably why the blue bird sticks out.
        Could the mouse have something on him that is a contrasting color?
        I don’t know what the story is but if it would fit thematically, maybe add an element of danger by having a snake off to the side or a predatory bird silhouette in the sky?
        Do bugs or animals live in “mushroom land” and the mouse is passing by?

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos @kayleenartlover last edited by

          @kayleenartlover I think you’re right I’ll probably use it in another scene

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          • ajillustrates
            ajillustrates @Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Asyas_illos I do like the bird (or another background character if you want to switch it out). I think that the mouse doesn't need to be looking at it, but you could add a smaller, less prominent background into the spread, that's looking at and responding to the bird. That'd be a fun way to have the world feel more lived in, and still have the mouse focused on their journey.

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos @ajillustrates last edited by

              @ajillustrates thanks for the feedback, I have since relocated the bird to another scene, but I still would like to build up more of a lived in world, as you suggested. I will be brainstorming some more characters!

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              • Griffin McPherson
                Griffin McPherson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos I think since the bird isn’t relevant to the story it just feel a a bit distracting. I think normally it’s good to have a secondary story going on in an image but in this case since the primary story isn’t super complicated it may not work here

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                • Griffin McPherson
                  Griffin McPherson last edited by

                  I think using colors from the previous pages is a great way to keep it all connected! Looking forward to seeing more

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                    @Griffin-McPherson thanks yep I moved the bird saving him for another. In accordance with your portfolio questions I’m looking to make mine more cohesive as a whole including colors.

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                      Some spreads I’ve started the second I did a while back but wasn’t sure where to go with it, but it seems to fit in perfectly with thisA4D4E25A-1D02-4613-8C12-887717B95791.jpeg

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                      • Asyas_illos
                        Asyas_illos last edited by

                        How it’s setting up as a sequence, I don’t know why I chose this canvas size but I do love it
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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos last edited by

                          Made some changes to this one, still haven’t thought of what characters to add though.
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                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos last edited by

                            Needed some spot illos to go with the story. Still working on this, thought it should start at home25E59D48-F03B-4479-AADE-F2BDFB45090D.jpeg

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                            • tomparsonsart
                              tomparsonsart @Asyas_illos last edited by

                              @Asyas_illos I don't have much to add except these are great so far. Really cool shapes and colors. I also like the horizontal format, looks like a story playing out in a movie. Maybe a frame with some character interaction would be good. Although I like how the mouse is just in their little world, reacting to the environment.

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos @tomparsonsart last edited by

                                @tomparsonsart yes, I agree I need some more characters in there, thanks!

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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos last edited by

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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos last edited by

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                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      Ok just wrapped this one up
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                                      • ArtistErin
                                        ArtistErin @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        @Asyas_illos LOVE this mouse in his chair, saw your reel on IG and loved how your little drew in a drooping flower? Wondering if I got that right. 🙂

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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos @ArtistErin last edited by

                                          @ArtistErin haha it was actually something my daughter drew on there and the little spider. I did originally sketch a flowerpot but it didn’t make the final cut I guess.

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                                          • Asyas_illos
                                            Asyas_illos last edited by

                                            Yes I’m still messing with this one🙄 added some more but still lacking characters… what do you guys think of the added dandelions? Also I’ll take suggestions for characters😊
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