Mouse journey feedback
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@Asyas_illos I think since the bird isn’t relevant to the story it just feel a a bit distracting. I think normally it’s good to have a secondary story going on in an image but in this case since the primary story isn’t super complicated it may not work here
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I think using colors from the previous pages is a great way to keep it all connected! Looking forward to seeing more
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@Griffin-McPherson thanks yep I moved the bird saving him for another. In accordance with your portfolio questions I’m looking to make mine more cohesive as a whole including colors.
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Some spreads I’ve started the second I did a while back but wasn’t sure where to go with it, but it seems to fit in perfectly with this
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How it’s setting up as a sequence, I don’t know why I chose this canvas size but I do love it
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Made some changes to this one, still haven’t thought of what characters to add though.
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Needed some spot illos to go with the story. Still working on this, thought it should start at home
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@Asyas_illos I don't have much to add except these are great so far. Really cool shapes and colors. I also like the horizontal format, looks like a story playing out in a movie. Maybe a frame with some character interaction would be good. Although I like how the mouse is just in their little world, reacting to the environment.
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@tomparsonsart yes, I agree I need some more characters in there, thanks!
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Ok just wrapped this one up
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@Asyas_illos LOVE this mouse in his chair, saw your reel on IG and loved how your little drew in a drooping flower? Wondering if I got that right.
Erin Richardson
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@ArtistErin haha it was actually something my daughter drew on there and the little spider. I did originally sketch a flowerpot but it didn’t make the final cut I guess.
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Yes I’m still messing with this one
added some more but still lacking characters… what do you guys think of the added dandelions? Also I’ll take suggestions for characters
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@Asyas_illos I'm pro dandelions.
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@Asyas_illos Absolutely love these mouse illustrations! I'm not sure about the dandelions but I wonder whether you could have a large head of a gentle deer (for example) sniffing one of the mushrooms? Might be too distracting but for some reason I'm curious about it!
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@Jean-Watson thank you and I’ve since gone from yellow dandelions to floofy ones! And I like them much better , but I also messed with the mushrooms and I’m not sure why but I just can’t totally love this one yet it still needs something…
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@Asyas_illos maybe you could let him throw away his map or compass? Or have some cat leering at him from some hidden position? I like these dandallions more, they are softer, fitting the rest better.
