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    • tomparsonsart
      tomparsonsart @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos I don't have much to add except these are great so far. Really cool shapes and colors. I also like the horizontal format, looks like a story playing out in a movie. Maybe a frame with some character interaction would be good. Although I like how the mouse is just in their little world, reacting to the environment.

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @tomparsonsart last edited by

        @tomparsonsart yes, I agree I need some more characters in there, thanks!

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos last edited by

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos last edited by

              Ok just wrapped this one up
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              • ArtistErin
                ArtistErin @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos LOVE this mouse in his chair, saw your reel on IG and loved how your little drew in a drooping flower? Wondering if I got that right. 🙂

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos @ArtistErin last edited by

                  @ArtistErin haha it was actually something my daughter drew on there and the little spider. I did originally sketch a flowerpot but it didn’t make the final cut I guess.

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                    Yes I’m still messing with this one🙄 added some more but still lacking characters… what do you guys think of the added dandelions? Also I’ll take suggestions for characters😊
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                    • ArtistErin
                      ArtistErin @Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @Asyas_illos 😂

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                      • ajillustrates
                        ajillustrates @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos I'm pro dandelions.

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                        • Jean Watson
                          Jean Watson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                          @Asyas_illos Absolutely love these mouse illustrations! I'm not sure about the dandelions but I wonder whether you could have a large head of a gentle deer (for example) sniffing one of the mushrooms? Might be too distracting but for some reason I'm curious about it! 🙂

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                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos @Jean Watson last edited by

                            @Jean-Watson thank you and I’ve since gone from yellow dandelions to floofy ones! And I like them much better , but I also messed with the mushrooms and I’m not sure why but I just can’t totally love this one yet it still needs something…
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                            • Chantal Goetheer
                              Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                              @Asyas_illos maybe you could let him throw away his map or compass? Or have some cat leering at him from some hidden position? I like these dandallions more, they are softer, fitting the rest better.

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                              • Jean Watson
                                Jean Watson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                @Asyas_illos Like the floofy ones!

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                                • Kim Rosenlof
                                  Kim Rosenlof @Asyas_illos last edited by Kim Rosenlof

                                  @Asyas_illos This is really cute. I love the colors and the composition.
                                  If you squint your eyes, the mouse gets lost in the background a little, and I see the mushrooms first because of their value. I made it black and white below to show how close the values are between the mouse and background. You could make the mouse darker since the light is coming from the right, so the left will be partially shaded anyway, or you could put a light cool blue-green color behind the mouse to make the reddish orange stand out.
                                  It is a nice piece and I love all the nature elements you are using. Can't wait to see the finished piece.
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                                  • kirsten-mcg
                                    kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    @Asyas_illos I love this as a start of your series! The little mouse looking at his atlas and dreaming of all the places he'd like to go. And then he makes his dreams a reality!

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                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos @Kim Rosenlof last edited by

                                      @Kim-Rosenlof thanks for the value check! That’s really helpful, I’ve put this one on the back burner for now but I’ll revisit it soon!

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