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    January Contest WIP critique the heck out of it please

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    • ArtofAleksey
      ArtofAleksey @braden H last edited by

      @Braden-Hallett dang when’d you get so good at critiques. Ty I actually had a gut feeling to D because of that size. I like the solution to have the character turned and looking down. Perhaps a dog barking up at the creature and the old man not paying attention. Thanks im going to work on that one a bit more.

      instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
      alekseyillustration.com

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      • ArtofAleksey
        ArtofAleksey last edited by

        I think i like the Composition of the vertical one, but a more low angled shot would work better. I’m also thinking about the snow and Perhaps a crystal cave instead of stone? I want to make it feel cold. Like a glacial cave? I’ll have to do some research to see if glacial caves are a thing and tis not just a superman thing.
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        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
        alekseyillustration.com

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        • ArtofAleksey
          ArtofAleksey last edited by

          So i did 2 versions the only difference is the cave area.
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          instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
          alekseyillustration.com

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            jdubz last edited by

            I think the first one is a bit stronger because it feels like it removes the unnecessary space on the right side.

            Josh White
            https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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            • ArtofAleksey
              ArtofAleksey @jdubz last edited by ArtofAleksey

              @jdubz yeah I felt like it was too constricted

              I also think maybe i need to raise the ground level a bit, it looks too close to the edge. And perhaps the dino head.

              instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
              alekseyillustration.com

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              • ArtofAleksey
                ArtofAleksey last edited by

                Ok i think i figured out the values and the light source. I’m going to have to do some research to figure out the lighting for ice walls. I’m also going to do a more refined version of the interior comp to see if i like it more.

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                instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                alekseyillustration.com

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                • chrisaakins
                  chrisaakins @ArtofAleksey last edited by chrisaakins

                  @Aleksey THe tracks are getting lost a little bit. They should be more of a "star" in your production since that is the prompt and they are being downplayed by the dino. The suspense and drama I think you want to create might be getting lost as well. Maybe if you did a more vertical pitch and really let the tracks lead up to the cave and have a really good silhouette of the fellow looking at them, I think you will get more of the drama and suspense.

                  Also, why would the tracks appear white in the cave? Are they glowing?

                  Chris Akins
                  www.chrisakinsart.com
                  www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                  • ArtofAleksey
                    ArtofAleksey @chrisaakins last edited by

                    @chrisaakins yeah these are good points. I actually decided to go with my previous comp decision because i realized i was way more into it than this one. The foot prints in the cave were going to be melted snow, so water prints.

                    I decided to go with this comp instead: i also really wanted to draws a birb because i had an idea for this character, but also really like birbs.
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                    instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                    alekseyillustration.com

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                    • ArtofAleksey
                      ArtofAleksey last edited by ArtofAleksey

                      Ok i got rid of the bird because it wasnt helping create a story really in any way. But im liking where this is going. Does the tip of the tail feel too close?
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                      instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                      alekseyillustration.com

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                      • Coley
                        Coley @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                        @Aleksey this looks fantastic. Re the tip of the tail, it might feel a little close, maybe have it tilted more away and/or smaller?
                        I think this is going to be great!

                        https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                        • ArtofAleksey
                          ArtofAleksey @Coley last edited by

                          @Coley ok cool thank you thank you

                          Everyones been super helpful im very excited about this piece

                          instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                          alekseyillustration.com

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                          • ArtofAleksey
                            ArtofAleksey last edited by

                            Line work so far. I’m going to try and add texture using color and light rather than line
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                            instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                            alekseyillustration.com

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                            • KaraDaniel
                              KaraDaniel last edited by

                              Love it! Can't wait to see it in color!

                              instagram.com/sha_kara
                              karadaniel.net

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                              • ArtofAleksey
                                ArtofAleksey @KaraDaniel last edited by

                                @KaraDaniel thanks! colors gonna be a struggle but I think my method of stealing color palettes has been successful so far.

                                instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                alekseyillustration.com

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                                • ArtofAleksey
                                  ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                  Ok after great turmoil i think I finally found local colors that i like.23A12370-D96B-40C5-A161-D55C0B12C66B.jpeg

                                  instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                  alekseyillustration.com

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                                  • aska
                                    aska @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                    @Aleksey love the composition and colors!

                                    Aska
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                                    https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
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                                    • demotlj
                                      demotlj SVS OG @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                      @Aleksey This is looking so good!

                                      Laurie DeMott
                                      instagram.com/demotlj

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                                      • Coley
                                        Coley last edited by

                                        Looking so awesome. Love the colors and the shapes/composition.
                                        How does one go about stealing color palettes? Eyedropper tool?

                                        https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                                        • ArtofAleksey
                                          ArtofAleksey @Coley last edited by

                                          Thanks y’all
                                          @Coley and ya import a picture into the app you’re using then eye dropper tool
                                          I did tweak it some to my liking

                                          instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                          alekseyillustration.com

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                                          • Coley
                                            Coley @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                            @Aleksey very cool. Great way to learn. Maybe I'll steal from you 😅

                                            https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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