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    • theprairiefox
      theprairiefox @braden H last edited by

      @Braden-Hallett my only thought is I am not getting any emotion from the kid in the tree.

      Now you might be doing that intentionally and the viewer can read that the kid is happy not being in the mess or that the kid is sad being separated but I wonder if it would be more impactful (have a deeper emotional connection) if you went one way or the other and leaned into the kid's emotion?

      -The Prairie Fox
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      • baileyvidler
        baileyvidler last edited by

        This is such a simple concept, but really impactful! I really like seeing your grayscale work.

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        • Coley
          Coley last edited by

          Is that dog a pooper 🚽😂

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          • braden H
            braden H @miranda-hoover last edited by

            @Mirananemone said in Isolation contest WIP:

            I wish they were a little bit closer to the main bike, and that the other bike was a little more in the frame.

            Interesting! I'll definitely need to fiddle around with that 🙂

            @EliaMurrayArt said in Isolation contest WIP:

            that they were all pretty evenly spaced away from each other, and the bike. With the bike so centered, it feels like a star.

            Thanks for the feedback! I'll definitely play around with the spacing. I think the waterbaloon kids can definitely be happier closer to the tree branch 🙂

            @idid said in Isolation contest WIP:

            Also, maybe because you don't have values done yet,

            Not seen here, the many thumbnails and value studies, lol. We'll see how it goes, though. I think I prefer the idea of the isolated kid contrasting the other kids by being almost hidden away. Though I'm sure there'll be some contrasty things I can do and keep that 🙂 Thanks for the feedback!

            @theprairiefox said in Isolation contest WIP:

            Now you might be doing that intentionally

            I am in this particular case 🙂 I want the kid to be utterly completely and totally removed. Though I may give him a big ol' pair of headphones, lol.

            @Coley said in Isolation contest WIP:

            Is that dog a pooper 🚽😂

            That dog is indeed spreading the love 🙂

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            • braden H
              braden H last edited by

              Thanks everyone for the feedback thus far 😃

              Work progresses! I'm trying to slow down and get more detail into my linework. I have a tendency to say 'I'll add that with paint' and it never quite works out.

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              • miranda-hoover
                miranda-hoover @braden H last edited by

                @Braden-Hallett Looking great!

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                • braden H
                  braden H last edited by

                  Work progresses

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                  • braden H
                    braden H last edited by

                    Work Progresses progresses. 'Bout 1/3 done some values.

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                    • William Meany
                      William Meany last edited by

                      Hi, Branden

                      Nice work! My eye goes to the fallen bicycle first, and the nice vignette of the arguing cyclists. I don't notice the boy in the foreground until later. I don't know which is the focus, but Changing the foreground character's hair color to something lighter may give it more contrast and more visual pull.

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                      • xin li
                        xin li last edited by

                        @Braden-Hallett I love the value design of the image. It is very unexpected, becautiful.

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                        • braden H
                          braden H last edited by

                          Work progresses!

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                          • EliaMurrayArt
                            EliaMurrayArt @braden H last edited by

                            @Braden-Hallett that tiny knot in the wall is just. excellent. like a teeny tiny eye watching over his shoulder.

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                            • Miriam
                              Miriam @braden H last edited by Miriam

                              @Braden-Hallett - This looks great & the values are adding a lot! I like how the book is lighter than anything else in the treehouse. I agree that the detail of the knot in the wood is such a nice bit to add. It's also fighting with the book for attention though, since they are the only high-contrast points in the dark area. With the knot's hole being brighter, my eye keeps being tugged that way. Do you think you could tone it down & still have it blend with the grass below? Or maybe we could assume a leaf gets in the way & that's what shows through the hole? Just some ideas.

                              I like how you frame the image with the gradient at the top, the tree on the left & bottom, and the sidewalk to the right. It helps the eye start at the center, and then I naturally look down & get the payoff of the quiet reader.

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                                aprilshin last edited by

                                Love how you're handling the grass! So subtle, but so good!

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                                • braden H
                                  braden H last edited by

                                  Right under the wire again. Sorry for not responding to everyone, my month got... Busy. But I finished it off! Hooray!

                                  I hate it 😃

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                                  • theprairiefox
                                    theprairiefox @braden H last edited by

                                    @Braden-Hallett I think your darks are too dark. My wife did not even see the boys until I pointed him out.

                                    -The Prairie Fox
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                                    • braden H
                                      braden H @theprairiefox last edited by

                                      @theprairiefox said in Isolation contest WIP:

                                      I think your darks are too dark. My wife did not even see the boys until I pointed him out.

                                      Fair enough! You're almost certainly right. There's always next time since I think I'm doooooooone with this one for a little while 😃

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                                      • Coley
                                        Coley @braden H last edited by Coley

                                        @Braden-Hallett if you can hate something this good then life ain't so bad 🥴

                                        Btw I have a love/hate relationship with my piece so I kinda sorta get it 😁

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                                        • LauraA
                                          LauraA SVS OG @braden H last edited by

                                          @Braden-Hallett Fascinating! Do you often hate your pieces by the end? I sometimes wonder if working hard to finish a piece in time inclines us hate it, and what we can do about that. That said, you are about ten times quicker than I am!

                                          I love the Go, Dog! Go! "big dog party" aspect of this one, and I identify strongly with the child in the tree house. In fact, I strongly suspect that someone is about to come ask him/her why he doesn't go join the fun and thus ruin his peace 😆. Great work, as usual!

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