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    June Prompt WIP - critiques welcome please

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    • Neha Rawat
      Neha Rawat last edited by

      These are so cute! Super work on the thumbnails!

      I also like B for Clyde and F for Bongo.
      I also like the depth in E since it sort of shows the journey and obstacles that Bongo has to overcome to reach his goal.

      For your questions, I love everything cute! And the clothes are nice if it adds to their personality.

      Really looking forward to see this develop! 🙂

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      • Johanna Kim
        Johanna Kim SVS OG last edited by

        Hello friends (@Neha-Rawat @Nyrryl-Cadiz @K-Flagg @Diane-Kond @deborah-Haagenson @Kevin-Longueil @Jacy13 @gavpartridge @miranda-hoover @charitymunoz @Jeremy-Ross), thanks so much for taking the time to chime in about your preferences and suggestions. I tried my best to listen to all your notes. In some instances, I got conflicting notes, so I had to use my best judgement and landed on the following thumbnail sketch. Now I'm considering color palette. I'm leaning towards color sketch B because it feels like summer to me, and it's the least reminiscent of Curious George, as much as I love that character.

        I'm working on finalizing the drawing now but if you see anything glaringly wrong or bothersome, please let me know. Thanks again!

        Color studies-2 s.jpg

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        • Johanna Kim
          Johanna Kim SVS OG @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

          @Nyrryl-Cadiz Thanks for the note about D appearing sexual. I always worry about inserting that kind of connotation into a children's illustration.

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          • Johanna Kim
            Johanna Kim SVS OG last edited by

            @gavpartridge Thanks for your comments. As for my thumbnails, these were version 2 of my thumbnails, so you could understand them. You should have seen the first scribbly ones--unreadable, for sure! I think it's better to keep thumbnails really loose, though. I find that as soon as I start tightening up the drawing, I lose that feeling of spontaneity and spark. I'm actually trying to work on this illustration faster than usual, since I have a habit of working an illustration to death.

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            • Johanna Kim
              Johanna Kim SVS OG @Kevin Longueil last edited by

              @Kevin-Longueil Thanks for your vote for D:) I really like that bold perspective and will have to find a better use for it in a future illustration.

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              • deborah Haagenson
                deborah Haagenson @Johanna Kim last edited by

                @Johanna-Kim I agree with your choice. I like B! To me it's got more life than the other two.

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                • Jacy13
                  Jacy13 @Johanna Kim last edited by

                  @Johanna-Kim I also like B for the color palette as well! Looks very lively and vibrant 😃

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                  • Julia
                    Julia @Johanna Kim last edited by Julia

                    @Johanna-Kim hello! I am coming a little late. My favourite would have been D with an opened mouth but I like your final sketch, it looks great too!
                    I can't wait to see the final drawing in colours. Good luck!

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                    • Johanna Kim
                      Johanna Kim SVS OG last edited by

                      Hi Friends,

                      Here's the painted version.

                      Some questions:
                      Is there anything here that's bugging you (even if you don't know why)?
                      Is Bongo cute enough?
                      Is Clyde too scary for kids?

                      Bongo_painting7s.jpg

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                      • Neha Rawat
                        Neha Rawat last edited by

                        @Johanna-Kim This is so cute! I love the soothing color palette and Clyde is perfect! I love Bongo's teasing expression. The way you've shown the underwater part and the distant foliage is super! I'm struggling to find anything to critique!

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                        • carlianne
                          carlianne @Johanna Kim last edited by

                          @Johanna-Kim I agree with Neha! It looks great!! I don't think Clyde looks too scary and you really nailed the teasing expression

                          The only thing that causes me to pause is the branch that bongo is on. I was struggling to tell if it was part of a tree or a leaf for a while, maybe you could just clarify that.

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                          • D
                            Diane Kond last edited by

                            I love the look of the alligator in the back 🙂

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                            • Johanna Kim
                              Johanna Kim SVS OG last edited by

                              Hey friends,
                              Just want to say thanks again for all the help through my process. I believe that all your notes and encouragement helped to make this illustration far better than if I had worked on it on my own. But I know I still have lots to learn.

                              @carlianne Thanks for that note about the branch. I made some changes (see detail) which I hope clarifies things. But even if not, I think it's time to submit this illo and move on to the next thing.

                              Bongo_painting8-detail.jpg

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                              • carlianne
                                carlianne @Johanna Kim last edited by

                                @Johanna-Kim cute! Do it!

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