WIP spreads for a story, critique requested :-)
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@xin-li I didn't realize the sail was the moon, lovely! But I'm sure that once it's rendered, it will be clear, as will the way they hang the starts. I hope you can post the final image at some point soon. I am so curious about the manuscript and how the two images you started with relate to different parts of the text. Thanks for sharing all of this, it's always fun.
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Hello, everyone.
Thank you so much for the constructive critiques, and encouragement. I proceeded with the painting this week. Here is what I have so far. I have got the deadline for this on monday. Feedback and critiques are much appreciated.@carolinebautista I am not sure what I can share regarding the manuscript yet. Maybe later in the process
Note: I am still working on the stars. There is a specific description in the text about the stars, which I have not figure out how to do them yet.
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Looking amazing! I love the colours you have chosen so far. I would maybe add one more accent colour to draw your eye to the father and son, eg maybe their tops could have a touch of a pink/red/orangey warmth instead of yellow. Not sure how it would look against the purple background, the yellow might work better in the end
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It's so lovely, pleased you decided to go with this one. There's such a nice magical 'mary poppins' feel to the skyline and you can feel the bond between the man and boy nicely.
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@xin-li it's beautiful!
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@xin-li So beautiful!
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@xin-li It's beautiful! I know that since you haven't quite figured out the stars this may not help, but if the boy and his father are hanging the stars, maybe the star that is closest can be connected to a trail of stars all throughout the sky? Otherwise the closest star seems to be in a spot they haven't visited yet. The trail can arc through the spread, and swish around to suggest water, and then you'll get the size variation along with the movement of the boat. I also like the patchwork (i think it's quilted with buttons, is that right?) feel you have to the sail and stars, so maybe pieces of dark sky can be hanging all around, like fabric, for attaching the stars. They don't feel like they have weight right now because they feel sewn.
I love the cityscape and all the people watching the sky.
I'm a bit nosy about the text, sorry
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@eriberart I am fine tuning the color now. Will try out your suggestions
@Rachel-Horne , @Coley , @Mara-Price thank you so much
@carolinebautista thank you for your feedback. I see what you mean. But for the story reasons, I am going to keep the sky as it is. There is something about the wind direction that may contribute to the disbelieve of this scene. I will investigate this later as I ran out of time to do a big change that at this moment :-).
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@xin-li Woah, the color really brought this piece to life! I'm loving the composition as well! Great illustration
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