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    • burvantill
      burvantill Moderator last edited by burvantill

      I was thinking about the monsters lined up in the foreground and i think you should mix up the sizing and position a little. Maybe one big one in the extreme foreground on the right to keep the focus in the room. Am I making sense?

      Lisa Burvant
      www.lisaburvant.com
      Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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      • kimmypie
        kimmypie @chrisaakins last edited by

        @chrisaakins your fire place looks beautiful but it competes with Santa for attention.
        It kind of looks like you could use more spread out characters to add some depth to the composition. Maybe a couple right inside the door or overlapping the fireplace, Idk. I agree that Santa looks like he’s leaving not coming. Maybe he could use more of a “surprise” posture.
        Overall I think you have a good thing going. I look forward to seeing the end result. Good luck.

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        • chrisaakins
          chrisaakins last edited by

          Okay, how’s this?
          32D8FA7D-348A-46A7-B16C-B0DD3BD68892.jpeg

          Chris Akins
          www.chrisakinsart.com
          www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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          • chrisaakins
            chrisaakins last edited by

            I fixed Santa’s position. Anybody see anything else?
            D83A2DAF-3507-4E67-A3DE-8CF065AB36E5.jpeg

            Chris Akins
            www.chrisakinsart.com
            www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins last edited by

              Made some last minute adjustments. Which is better, the brighter one or the more textured one? 3ECB9462-F321-4844-9546-0FD0EA912E47.jpeg
              8E258C78-81F9-4166-958E-35367078519A.jpeg

              Chris Akins
              www.chrisakinsart.com
              www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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              • kimmypie
                kimmypie @chrisaakins last edited by

                @chrisaakins I'm drawn to the candle that splits the scene in half. Santa looks better. I would see how it looks if you punched up Santa's color a little. Idk, it may be too out of place. Keep going!

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                • ?
                  A Former User last edited by

                  in my opinion its right now a bit messy and your main focal point which seems to be santa is challenged a lot by all the different things on the image. i would push the shadow/lights more, add rimlights and take the enviromental lightcolor into consideration to seperate them from him more.

                  here a quick messy rework to give you a hint at which direction i would push it to
                  alt text

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                  • chrisaakins
                    chrisaakins @Guest last edited by

                    @Molambo I see what you mean. How’s’ this?
                    01277BCC-D9CB-44DC-A786-AE5D2FC199B2.jpeg

                    Chris Akins
                    www.chrisakinsart.com
                    www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                    • chrisaakins
                      chrisaakins @chrisaakins last edited by

                      Ugh I think I went too dark. Maybe this? I think I have been looking at this too long.
                      A6AD3173-0F9B-4E6D-8FEB-626987E2E147.jpeg

                      Chris Akins
                      www.chrisakinsart.com
                      www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                      • kimmypie
                        kimmypie @chrisaakins last edited by

                        @chrisaakins I like the candle lower.

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                        • chrisaakins
                          chrisaakins last edited by

                          I think I’m done? I feel like it’s not good enough but I think I need to be done. 3784E492-DADD-43A6-BA50-67D442434051.jpeg

                          Chris Akins
                          www.chrisakinsart.com
                          www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                          • burvantill
                            burvantill Moderator @chrisaakins last edited by

                            @chrisaakins I like this one. 👍👍👍

                            Lisa Burvant
                            www.lisaburvant.com
                            Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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