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    • chrisaakins
      chrisaakins last edited by

      Before I get too much further, how is this composition? (And ignore Santa’s leg, I know I gotta fix it). How are the values? How’s the story. I still have to draw the other characters.
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      Chris Akins
      www.chrisakinsart.com
      www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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      • burvantill
        burvantill Moderator last edited by burvantill

        First impressions
        Santa stands out well. My eye goes right to him.
        It’s not clear to me what is happening in the story. I may be unfamiliar with the story so might not get it for that reason.
        My eye wants to go to the right and keep going. Maybe make the right side darker to keep the focus on the left side.
        I think your fireplace looks really good. And I’m interested in seeing the rest of the characters. 🙂
        Edit: Face palm!!! I understand the story now. Lol. I had a long day yesterday, I didn’t realize this was part of the October contest. 😊

        Lisa Burvant
        www.lisaburvant.com
        Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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        • ajillustrates
          ajillustrates last edited by

          The one thing that sticks out to me is that it looks like, based on his body position, Santa is leaving, and looking back for one last wave before pulling the door closed behind him. But if I'm reading the story correctly, he's just entered, ruining the spooky party with his Christmas cheer.

          https://ajillustrates.com
          https://www.instagram.com/aj.illustrates/

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          • burvantill
            burvantill Moderator last edited by burvantill

            I was thinking about the monsters lined up in the foreground and i think you should mix up the sizing and position a little. Maybe one big one in the extreme foreground on the right to keep the focus in the room. Am I making sense?

            Lisa Burvant
            www.lisaburvant.com
            Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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            • kimmypie
              kimmypie @chrisaakins last edited by

              @chrisaakins your fire place looks beautiful but it competes with Santa for attention.
              It kind of looks like you could use more spread out characters to add some depth to the composition. Maybe a couple right inside the door or overlapping the fireplace, Idk. I agree that Santa looks like he’s leaving not coming. Maybe he could use more of a “surprise” posture.
              Overall I think you have a good thing going. I look forward to seeing the end result. Good luck.

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              • chrisaakins
                chrisaakins last edited by

                Okay, how’s this?
                32D8FA7D-348A-46A7-B16C-B0DD3BD68892.jpeg

                Chris Akins
                www.chrisakinsart.com
                www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                • chrisaakins
                  chrisaakins last edited by

                  I fixed Santa’s position. Anybody see anything else?
                  D83A2DAF-3507-4E67-A3DE-8CF065AB36E5.jpeg

                  Chris Akins
                  www.chrisakinsart.com
                  www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                  • chrisaakins
                    chrisaakins last edited by

                    Made some last minute adjustments. Which is better, the brighter one or the more textured one? 3ECB9462-F321-4844-9546-0FD0EA912E47.jpeg
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                    Chris Akins
                    www.chrisakinsart.com
                    www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                    • kimmypie
                      kimmypie @chrisaakins last edited by

                      @chrisaakins I'm drawn to the candle that splits the scene in half. Santa looks better. I would see how it looks if you punched up Santa's color a little. Idk, it may be too out of place. Keep going!

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                      • ?
                        A Former User last edited by

                        in my opinion its right now a bit messy and your main focal point which seems to be santa is challenged a lot by all the different things on the image. i would push the shadow/lights more, add rimlights and take the enviromental lightcolor into consideration to seperate them from him more.

                        here a quick messy rework to give you a hint at which direction i would push it to
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                        • chrisaakins
                          chrisaakins @Guest last edited by

                          @Molambo I see what you mean. How’s’ this?
                          01277BCC-D9CB-44DC-A786-AE5D2FC199B2.jpeg

                          Chris Akins
                          www.chrisakinsart.com
                          www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                          • chrisaakins
                            chrisaakins @chrisaakins last edited by

                            Ugh I think I went too dark. Maybe this? I think I have been looking at this too long.
                            A6AD3173-0F9B-4E6D-8FEB-626987E2E147.jpeg

                            Chris Akins
                            www.chrisakinsart.com
                            www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                            • kimmypie
                              kimmypie @chrisaakins last edited by

                              @chrisaakins I like the candle lower.

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                              • chrisaakins
                                chrisaakins last edited by

                                I think I’m done? I feel like it’s not good enough but I think I need to be done. 3784E492-DADD-43A6-BA50-67D442434051.jpeg

                                Chris Akins
                                www.chrisakinsart.com
                                www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                                • burvantill
                                  burvantill Moderator @chrisaakins last edited by

                                  @chrisaakins I like this one. 👍👍👍

                                  Lisa Burvant
                                  www.lisaburvant.com
                                  Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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