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    March contest. Feedback would BEE lovely thanks :)

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    • lizardillo
      lizardillo @carolinebautista last edited by

      @carolinebautista no you’ve not spoilt it at all, this is great. I’m enjoying the challenge as this is something out of my comfort zone. You’re not the only one who’s noticed the wing issue so it’s a valid point. I value people taking time from their day to give a critique so thank you.

      Website: lizardillo.co.uk
      IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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      • Valerie Light
        Valerie Light @lizardillo last edited by

        @lizardillo It doesn't look to me like this thing has you beat! I think the ball joint/ aviator hat flaps are a great solution. I also really like that when you do the close up of his face for the character design page, his head might have a silhouette that's similar to a little bumble bee already. That said, I also really dig the moth variation, too. I think you're on a great track!

        www.valerielightillustration.com
        www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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        • Dima Eichhorn
          Dima Eichhorn @lizardillo last edited by

          @lizardillo it is awesome, and so cute.

          https://www.instagram.com/dima_eichhorn/

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          • lizardillo
            lizardillo last edited by

            Well, he briefly turned into a moth (a moth and firefly seem a better partnership), but I had trouble making a moth character appealing, have a backstory and not just be a moth (lots of moth research going on and wow there are some amazing moths in the world). I'm sticking to the bee-like 'Honey Farmer' from a the village who's honey is going to get ransacked. Wings are now fully mobile (although slightly bending the rules of physics) and are being used as a form of expression like horses ears. He can curl up in them to sleep (in a flower).

            I know the wings were an issue to start with but I hope I can make this come across as not too far-fetched that it doesn't work as a concept.

            Now I have to refine all this so all of the limbs, wings and facial expressions are consistent and add the extra details. I've given myself far too much work here!! My comfort zone is a distant memory 😧

            Rough sketches:

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            Website: lizardillo.co.uk
            IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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            • Jacy13
              Jacy13 @lizardillo last edited by

              @lizardillo I think this guy is really unique. The wings are a challenge, but I think you're doing a great job working with that. I like that they are so expressive in the facial expressions! I say just keep working through. The end results are going to be way cool; I can tell 🙂

              Deviantart: https://www.deviantart.com/jacy13
              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/jacy13draws/?hl=en
              Portfolio: https://jacy13.artstation.com/

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos last edited by

                This little guy is so cute!

                Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
                www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
                https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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                • lizardillo
                  lizardillo last edited by lizardillo

                  More development, now with his bag and traveller items (including teddy bear strapped to his bag) and I have reduced the wing size on his 'flying hat'. Add things to his belt as bees carry pollen in pouches on their legs although I think it may be becoming a little overcomplicated now. He has drawn a smiley mouth on the back of his hat as the wing sockets look like eyes. I think I may have lost the original eye/body proportions in this new pass but I can redo that in the next round/redraw/cleanup.

                  I'm having real trouble with the head and face as it's just not my style to use real eyes (I usually use small black ovals), the props I'm fine with. This is an absolute nightmare for me.

                  Still not 100% comfortable with the entire concept because of the head and face. Any feedback would be appreciated, thank you.

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                  Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                  IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                  • Georgios Christopoulos
                    Georgios Christopoulos @lizardillo last edited by

                    @lizardillo Hello Liz!Love this character and love the props designing!!I think the eyes that present a problem to your view, can be a bit more cartoony.I took some time time to tweek with the eyes and facial features! i hope it helps in some way!! Cannot wait to see this finished!!!

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                    Instagram : https://www.instagram.com/g.chris.artwork/
                    Deviantart : https://www.deviantart.com/g-chris

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                    • lizardillo
                      lizardillo @Georgios Christopoulos last edited by

                      @Georgios-Christopoulos thank you so much for this, it's a vast improvement. I have always had a problem with expression so this is really helpful.

                      Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                      IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                      • Georgios Christopoulos
                        Georgios Christopoulos @lizardillo last edited by

                        @lizardillo happy to help!!!

                        Instagram : https://www.instagram.com/g.chris.artwork/
                        Deviantart : https://www.deviantart.com/g-chris

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                        • lizardillo
                          lizardillo last edited by lizardillo

                          Progress so far... still needs some tweaking especially around the wings and put the top part of his pack showing over the shoulder on the left image, but I think I’m getting there. Hopefully the running, sitting, face will be easier now these stances are done. Thanks all. I really appreciate the help. I think I may be over my eye artists block at last!! This is meant to be his ‘stouthearted’ pose. 👍

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                          Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                          IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                          • Georgios Christopoulos
                            Georgios Christopoulos @lizardillo last edited by

                            @lizardillo this is getting beautiful!! Can't wait to see the poses!!

                            Instagram : https://www.instagram.com/g.chris.artwork/
                            Deviantart : https://www.deviantart.com/g-chris

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                            • lizardillo
                              lizardillo last edited by

                              Some clean-up, arranging on one sheet and colour yet to do. And the face close-up (I’m leaving that till last!). So… only a bit to do on the last day and a bit… EEEK! I need my British Summer Time hour back 😂

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                              Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                              IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                              • Kim Rosenlof
                                Kim Rosenlof last edited by

                                This is looking great! I like the way you showed the movement of the wings.

                                Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kiminyrose/

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                                • lizardillo
                                  lizardillo last edited by

                                  Sorry about the delay but I just wanted to say thank you for the help and support with this. It’s my first time posting a WIP and figure/face design is something I really need to work on which I why I took on the brief as a personal challenge. I actually decided to give up on this at one point because I was struggling a lot. The feedback helped me to decide to go for it at the last minute (and finished at 3.30am UK time to hit the MST time zone deadline). Thank you, I really appreciate it.

                                  Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                                  IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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