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    • Fay
      Fay last edited by Fay

      I would pick up a book with this cover! It has a dark interstellar yet open feel to it with a side of mystery! During the characters silhouette phase, at first I thought the child close to the title had elongated shoes until the line details were drawn in. This is such a small detail and can be dismissed, but at first glance the absence of the heel on his left leg makes the cuff of his pants come across as the heel and in previous versions the heel was present.

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      • braden H
        braden H @carriecopadraws last edited by

        @carriecopadraws said in How's this vertical title look?:

        @Braden-Hallett I love the evolution of this cover! I'd definitely pick up this book off the shelf.

        Awesome! That's good ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

        @Fay said in How's this vertical title look?:

        During the characters silhouette phase, at first I thought the child close to the title had elongated shoes until the line details were drawn in. This is such a small detail and can be dismissed, but at first glance the absence of the heel on his left leg makes the cuff of his pants come across as the heel and in previous versions the heel was present.

        So it works better now the details are filled in, yes?

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        • Melissa_Bailey
          Melissa_Bailey @braden H last edited by Melissa_Bailey

          @Braden-Hallett looking really good!

          One cover design suggestion: tilt the โ€œtheโ€ to line up with the rest of the title. Offsetting it like that draws too much attention to it.

          Nice work, as always!

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          • Fay
            Fay last edited by Fay

            @Braden-Hallett Yes and no...Iโ€™m having a case of rabbit-duck illusion. I see what youโ€™ve drawn and also see a ballerina leg, the shoeโ€™s tongue looks like the heel...

            Will you be adding colour or monochromatic? Will the other shoe have loose shoe laces?
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            • braden H
              braden H @Fay last edited by

              @Fay Definitely adding colour to the characters. I always leave it til last ๐Ÿ™‚

              Maybe with colour it'll read a bit better, but I can always tone down the tongue a tad!

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              • APHOTICMOTH
                APHOTICMOTH Moderator @braden H last edited by

                @Braden-Hallett The way this has evolved is great. Now it looks like a space adventure, while the first cover it looked to me like a mastermind controlling a kid, and a spooky friend. Like maybe they were mind swapping? Wasn't sure how to interpret it.

                I love that one kid is confident, and looking forward to whatever it happening, while the other is struggling a bit.

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                • braden H
                  braden H @APHOTICMOTH last edited by

                  @CLCanadyArts said in How's this vertical title look?:

                  Now it looks like a space adventure, while the first cover it looked to me like a mastermind controlling a kid, and a spooky friend. Like maybe they were mind swapping? Wasn't sure how to interpret it.

                  Thanks ๐Ÿ˜ƒ Space adventure is definitely what I'm goin' for! The other cover does definitely make a lot more sense once the reader's halfway through the book, lol.

                  @CLCanadyArts said in How's this vertical title look?:

                  I love that one kid is confident, and looking forward to whatever it happening, while the other is struggling a bit.

                  I imagine that swimming in zero G would be kinda like skating, skiing, or riding a bike. People that can do it make it look easy. People that can't, weeeeeeell no so much ๐Ÿ™‚

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                  • Gaelle Grizzly
                    Gaelle Grizzly @braden H last edited by

                    @Braden-Hallett Hi Braden. As always, your style and your way of designing things are just awesome. When this book will get printed, I'll definitly buy a copy :).

                    As for the illustration itself, I had a hard time figuring out where the boys are, in you two last illustration (a spaceship I suppose, but are they in or out?) From my point of view, it was may more readable in the illustration where we could see a part of the spaceship on the left upper corner. But that's just a netpicking point of view, soooo don't take it to seriously.

                    Love your work!

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                    • braden H
                      braden H @Gaelle Grizzly last edited by

                      @Gaelle-Grizzly said in How's this vertical title look?:

                      it was may more readable in the illustration where we could see a part of the spaceship on the left upper corner. But that's just a netpicking point of view, soooo don't take it to seriously.

                      Interesting! Maybe I can have the best of both worlds and have that part of the spaceship there but much darker than it was (so it's there but it doesn't class with the lettering)

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                      • Fay
                        Fay last edited by

                        Yes the colour helped with the foot/heel separation for sure!

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                        • braden H
                          braden H @Fay last edited by

                          @Fay Awesome! Good to know ๐Ÿ™‚

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