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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @Jeremy Ross last edited by

      @jeremy-ross oh yah! That’s way better! Nice!

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      • Jeremy Ross
        Jeremy Ross @Asyas_illos last edited by

        Thanks @asyas_illos! Look forward to coloring this one this week.

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        • TessaW
          TessaW last edited by

          I really like the zoomed out view. I just wonder if the starfish poster might be distracting? Will people think the star outside is a starfish too? Maybe make it a regular star poster? It might not matter, but it just gave me pause.

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          • Jeremy Ross
            Jeremy Ross @TessaW last edited by

            Thanks @tessaw, great point!

            Maybe “Wish upon a Star”, which is why the star is visiting to grant her a wish?

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            • Jeremy Ross
              Jeremy Ross @Jeremy Ross last edited by

              Finally found time this weekend to color it.

              Appreciate everyone’s feedback!

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              • Norman Morana
                Norman Morana @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                @jeremy-ross This is awesome, your values in the redo are handled much much better. You have some good textures going, too!

                Onwards,

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                • carlianne
                  carlianne @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                  @jeremy-ross really really cute! I'm wondering if a little rim light on her hair might help the girl pop a little. But you might also want to watch out for the tangent of the ball tip on the bed is having with her hair.

                  The color and values are really nice and the girl and star are both very cute 😊

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                  • Jeremy Ross
                    Jeremy Ross @Norman Morana last edited by

                    Thank you @norman-morana!

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                    • Jeremy Ross
                      Jeremy Ross @carlianne last edited by

                      Hi @carlianne, good catch on the tangent, I meant to fix that sooner. I’ll give it a tweak and add a little extra rim lighting to her hair.

                      Thank you!

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                      • Jeremy Ross
                        Jeremy Ross @carlianne last edited by

                        Hi @carlianne, moved the bed frame ball up to avoid tangent and slapped on some rim lighting on the girl’s hair.

                        Thanks again for the feedback!

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