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    End of the line…wip ^_^

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    • marek.halko
      marek.halko @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos well, i just love drawing fish😀.

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      • Miriam
        Miriam @marek.halko last edited by Miriam

        @marek-halko said in End of the line…wip ^_^:

        well, i just love drawing fish

        😄 This made me laugh! 🐟

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        • Miriam
          Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @Asyas_illos The cat & dog chase scene—turned escape to sea—is a good concept. I like that the dogs look friendly (they are so cute!) and just want to play, so it wouldn't really be the end for kitty Kamari—except maybe the end of the cat's dignity if the dogs covered Kamari in dog slobber!

          I think the straight-on side view works well with your style.

          I also like the way @marek-halko drew the water. It adds more movement and excitement to the piece. I also like the bouy in the water & the way the ship is sitting low in the water with the big haul of fish in the drawover. And I agree, nice job on the pile of fish. 🙂 🎣 🐟

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          • AngelinaKizz
            AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Asyas_illos with this one, I would like to see that the cat is going to land in the boat... so maybe have him more mid air?

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            • Chantal Goetheer
              Chantal Goetheer @AngelinaKizz last edited by

              @Asyas_illos I liked the leg of the fisherman seeing as if he's really hauling something in one of the first sketches. The point of view with the quay side more up and boat more down is really nice and dynamic especially when the cat is already jumping more petrified into the void because she maybe doesn't see the boat with the fish yet. Great idea yet again!

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                @Chantal-Goetheer thanks! ☺️

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by Asyas_illos

                  @AngelinaKizz thank you I did end moving the cat maybe it looks a little more believable now?

                  Here’s the progress from the past two days took some of you fine peoples advice into account and rearranged this a tad. I’m still working on the fishing part of it, positioning of the line, fish, and fish pile etc.

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                  • AngelinaKizz
                    AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos it looks great!

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                      Do you think the little dog is one dog too many?
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                      • Chantal Goetheer
                        Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos i do like it adding to that white big pas. And the little doggies are the most ferocious 😀

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                        • Chantal Goetheer
                          Chantal Goetheer @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                          Paw instead of pas

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                          • ?
                            A Former User @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos I think it's fine with or without the little dog.
                            Lovely illustration. The cat is great!

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos @Guest last edited by

                              @Stephanie-H thanks Stephanie!

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                                Here’s a little update, still some things to work on, let me know if you see anything that stands out😊
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                                • kirsten-mcg
                                  kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                  @Asyas_illos this is looking so cute! Just one suggestion, maybe add a darker line to the fisherman’s sleeve to help it stand out more? I was at first confused with the blob of yellow and had to look really closely before I could make sense of his pose.

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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                                    @kirsten-mcg good idea thanks!

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                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      Ok I am gonna sit on this for a bit, I think it’s pretty much done though, thanks to all those who helped me out with their wonderful feedback!
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                                      • AngelinaKizz
                                        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        @Asyas_illos what I think you can get rid of is the Danes back leg. It’s hard to read it as the leg and my eye goes straight there because of the high contrast. It would be highly plausible that while running his back leg wouldn’t be visible so I don’t think it’ll look off to lose it. I do like the little dog as he fills in the space in front of the sheep dog and adds balance to your large and small shape distribution.

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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by Asyas_illos

                                          @AngelinaKizz thanks I’ll work with it!

                                          Ok I wondered what it might look like as a boardwalk instead of stone pier, any thoughts? It’s just a rough of course.
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                                          • allysa
                                            allysa @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                            @Asyas_illos this is lovely! Personally, I think the empty space of the wooden pier is distracting from the action - the stones blended a bit more and allowed the drama of the dogs and the cat to catch the eye more quickly. I love the concept 🙂

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