25 Nov 2022, 20:27
Do you think the little dog is one dog too many?
End of the line…wip ^_^
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@Asyas_illos The cat & dog chase scene—turned escape to sea—is a good concept. I like that the dogs look friendly (they are so cute!) and just want to play, so it wouldn't really be the end for kitty Kamari—except maybe the end of the cat's dignity if the dogs covered Kamari in dog slobber!
I think the straight-on side view works well with your style.
I also like the way @marek-halko drew the water. It adds more movement and excitement to the piece. I also like the bouy in the water & the way the ship is sitting low in the water with the big haul of fish in the drawover. And I agree, nice job on the pile of fish.
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@Asyas_illos with this one, I would like to see that the cat is going to land in the boat... so maybe have him more mid air?
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@Asyas_illos I liked the leg of the fisherman seeing as if he's really hauling something in one of the first sketches. The point of view with the quay side more up and boat more down is really nice and dynamic especially when the cat is already jumping more petrified into the void because she maybe doesn't see the boat with the fish yet. Great idea yet again!
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@Chantal-Goetheer thanks!
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@AngelinaKizz thank you I did end moving the cat maybe it looks a little more believable now?
Here’s the progress from the past two days took some of you fine peoples advice into account and rearranged this a tad. I’m still working on the fishing part of it, positioning of the line, fish, and fish pile etc.
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@Asyas_illos it looks great!
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Do you think the little dog is one dog too many?
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@Asyas_illos i do like it adding to that white big pas. And the little doggies are the most ferocious
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Paw instead of pas
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@Asyas_illos I think it's fine with or without the little dog.
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@Stephanie-H thanks Stephanie!
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Here’s a little update, still some things to work on, let me know if you see anything that stands out
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@Asyas_illos this is looking so cute! Just one suggestion, maybe add a darker line to the fisherman’s sleeve to help it stand out more? I was at first confused with the blob of yellow and had to look really closely before I could make sense of his pose.
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@kirsten-mcg good idea thanks!
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Ok I am gonna sit on this for a bit, I think it’s pretty much done though, thanks to all those who helped me out with their wonderful feedback!
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@Asyas_illos what I think you can get rid of is the Danes back leg. It’s hard to read it as the leg and my eye goes straight there because of the high contrast. It would be highly plausible that while running his back leg wouldn’t be visible so I don’t think it’ll look off to lose it. I do like the little dog as he fills in the space in front of the sheep dog and adds balance to your large and small shape distribution.
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@AngelinaKizz thanks I’ll work with it!
Ok I wondered what it might look like as a boardwalk instead of stone pier, any thoughts? It’s just a rough of course.
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@Asyas_illos this is lovely! Personally, I think the empty space of the wooden pier is distracting from the action - the stones blended a bit more and allowed the drama of the dogs and the cat to catch the eye more quickly. I love the concept
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@Asyas_illos Hmmm... that's a tough one. I think the boardwalk can work well, but I prefer the stone pier. This may just be pure subjective preference, but it the stones kinda helps make the whole background become a cool analagous color scheme, letting the warmth of the characters stand out. if you stick with the stone, I'd just either darken or lighten the portion of the fishing line that overlaps the wall and goes into the water to separate it. Oh, and I agree with @AngelinaKizz - the back leg of the dane sucks my eye to edge of piece, instead of letting it flow through the action of the dogs to the cat. I'd lose it. Whichever direction you go, I love the style and the characters - this is awesome work!
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@ajillustrates thanks for the feedback! I’m torn between them!