Help me kill my darling
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@Nyrryl-Cadiz I think you’re right. If you do have tine to do a draw-over, I’d love that!
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I love the feel of this, and your style of rendering. But I was puzzled by the bowler hats before you described the story, wasn't quite sure what they were. And even after, I think they are a bit odd, with the cigar just hanging there underneath, with no face or anything else.
Take this with a grain of salt, because I'm no expert, but I'm thinking of movies or posters I've seen, where there is a villain in the dark and you can only see a silhouette with some rim light, and a glowing cigarette, and maybe the whites of their eyes. Maybe if you just had one of them and did something similar. The shapes of the jacket could be the background, interacting with other elements. I like the smoke in the background, maybe you could have it also come forward and obscure the edges of some foreground elements.
The main point is I think the elements need to vary in size more, as has been said. Otherwise It is a nice image and I love the way you draw and your texturing. I love the hand lettering also.
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@tomparsonsart Thank you so much for this feedback, it helps a lot! I’m currently redrawing this image from scratch based on all the inpus, and your comment on the silhouette of the men in grey is really valuable to me, as I just did them in roughly the same fashion again in the new image, without much thinking… I’ll take your advise on board, and I’ll post my results here when I have them.
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@Mia-Clarke Didn't mean to derail your progress! If you're going to keep those in, I think just even a small addition to the man or men might help clarify, like the eyes or something. Good luck!
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@tomparsonsart Not derailing at all! I’ve added the silhouettes now, and it made it better.
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@Griffin-McPherson Yep I agree with you here Griffin, it is easier to begin from scratch and thumbnail, establish values, create your focus and develop elements from there. I know, I'm in that boat too, trying to learn to not do what always gets me into trouble when a composition just isn't working. It sucks sometimes
But that said, you do have beautiful rendering techniques and I love your textures, colors, and mood...
