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    • Miriam
      Miriam last edited by

      Oh, these kids are in trouble!
      It looks great! The gestures and expressions are right on, & I like your idea for adding a dog! If they have one, it'd be in on this for sure!

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by

        Thanks guys! I just have to figure out what kind of dog to put in now.

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        • Miriam
          Miriam @TessaW last edited by

          @tessaw Ha, ha! I was wondering, "What kind of dog?".

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          • TessaW
            TessaW @Miriam last edited by

            @miriam Hah! Any suggestions? I have to admit, I'm more familiar with cats. There's too many different kinds of dogs, my mind goes blank!

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            • Miriam
              Miriam @TessaW last edited by Miriam

              @tessaw I guess it depends on how much space you want it to take up in the picture. Have you thought about whether it should be a big dog or a small one?

              You could go with a beagle or similar shaped dog that isn't a specific breed.
              Here's a cute one--it's a cross between a Yorkshire Terrier and a Beagle. Height: 12-15 inches, Weight: 20-25 lb.
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              https://www.dogmal.com/wp-content/uploads/2018/02/borkie.jpg

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              • Gary Wilkinson
                Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                I noticed that you had dropped off the forums a bit, but glad to see you have returned 😃

                I think a dog would be a nice addition, but feel that the piece feels a bit flat due to the composition and perspective. I think the piece looses some of it's shock (oh no they messed up the cake!) as perhaps too much is revealed all at once and the focal point isn't as solid as it could be. The floor is holding a lot of the weight in this scene, but adding a dog may fix that, although then you are going to have an added piece of action to the scene that is already quite busy. Another thought is, do we need to see the entire body of the father? If you brought him more into the foreground and darkened his values I as a viewer would feel more part of the scene and the "oh no we've been caught" focus of the scene would be better interpreted. There are just my thoughts though, so even if you don't use any of them I hope they are of use.

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                • TessaW
                  TessaW @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                  @gary-wilkinson Thanks for the input! I have to admit, I didn't play with the comp too much on this one. It was an assignment for a gesture class, where you had to utilize a certain model's poses to create a scene, and I think I just defaulted to showing the whole pose for assignment purposes. That doesn't mean I can't change it though. Additionally I wanted to try out a vignette that didn't have a square/rectangular format. I will play around with it and see how it looks!

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                  • TessaW
                    TessaW @Miriam last edited by

                    @miriam That dog is so cute!!

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                    • rcartwright
                      rcartwright last edited by

                      I would skip the dog, as it isn't needed to further the main story

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                      • TessaW
                        TessaW last edited by TessaW

                        How about this change? I think i would need to adjust the dad's pose a bit more if this change was made, but does it enhance the overall feel?

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                        • Miriam
                          Miriam @TessaW last edited by Miriam

                          @tessaw I liked the original composition, & felt like the girls were a strong 1st read. My reaction:
                          1st (the girls) Oh! They are IN Trouble! / Shocked
                          2nd (the man) The cake! / All that work! 😞
                          3rd noticing things like the bunny on the chair, & the squished frosting

                          This change looks good, too though--except the man's dark pants are drawing too much attention & pulling me down into that corner, and I miss the detail of the frosting. I do see that it's more like being in the scene rather than looking at the scene. I still like it both ways. I like the man's whole stance--it's a nice expression of "Oh, no!", and being able to see his face / expression.

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                          • Kevin Longueil
                            Kevin Longueil SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

                            @tessaw This is looking really nice! - i agree about the pants maybe being too dark - here is a quick thumbnail idea that might be cool? - adds a slightly more conspiratorial feel with another little girl in the window - just a thought - feel free to ignore 🙂

                            0_1529179056728_Untitled_Artwork 2.jpg

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                            • Jose Ramos
                              Jose Ramos @TessaW last edited by

                              @tessaw More chocolate on the floor!

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                              • holleywilliamson
                                holleywilliamson SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

                                @tessaw I like the change, it brings more focus on the girls. This is such a fun piece!

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                                • TessaW
                                  TessaW last edited by

                                  Thank you all for your feedback so far! It's been really helpful and you've provided some great ideas. I've made some additions, and I feel that perhaps the dad's pose may need to change as a result. What do you think of these general ideas?

                                  0_1529467839056_cake-buster-window.png

                                  0_1529467847247_cake-busters-dad-variations.png

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                                  • Chip Valecek
                                    Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

                                    @tessaw I like C the best. Great addition with the dog and kid in the window. You should had some chocolate hand prints on the walls or curtains.


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                                    • Miriam
                                      Miriam @TessaW last edited by

                                      @tessaw I like A & D the best (B seems like it could be read as angry instead of exasperated). All the additions look good! I also like the simplicity of the first one at the start of this thread. Whatever you decide to go with, this piece makes a fun little story!

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                                      • holleywilliamson
                                        holleywilliamson SVS OG last edited by

                                        I still like A best. I like that he is holding the spatula. Agree that B looks too angry

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                                        • Eli
                                          Eli @TessaW last edited by Eli

                                          I think I like A the best, with C as a close second. Love that he's holding the spatula--"Oh, think I'll just put the finishing touches on the caaaaaakkkkkeeee." I like the dog as well. I love the juxtaposition of the kids like "UH OH!!" and the dog's clueless joy! When my old girl was a puppy, I'd come home and she'd be sitting in a little pile of my ruined possessions, all proud and glad to see me! "Hi! I missed you! I destroyed your stuff while you were gone!"

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                                          • lenwen
                                            lenwen @TessaW last edited by

                                            @tessaw very interesting story! I like A the best because it shows clearly that the dad who just finished creating the cake. I really like this illustration 😃

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