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    • chrisaakins
      chrisaakins last edited by

      Wow! I am in love with this. Reminds me of my sixth grade. I think this is a very strong composition. I think A of the last group looks most natural with the lighting.

      Chris Akins
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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

        Haha! This is precious!

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        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

          During my first year in college, i took a BA in Music and let me just tell you when our classmates who never played brass instruments before like the trumpets, tubas, french horns, etc tried their hands on them, it was a very chaotic few minutes. This definitely reminds me of those time.

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          • lmrush
            lmrush Pro SVS OG @braden H last edited by

            @art-of-b Yes I am not sure what the answer is, perspective its tricky for me. It looks great. Awesome job on the value studies. Did you take Turbocharging with @Lee-White and @davidhohn ?

            Lisa Rush
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            • braden H
              braden H last edited by

              @lmrush Thanks! I did not take turbocharging, no. I'm still slowly working my way through the library of lessons.

              Work progresses! I think I went overboard figuring out values, but I'm still really figuring out style and process...

              I remember hearing that being too dark is better than being too light, and during the colour process It'll lighten up a bit.

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              • W-Coats
                W-Coats last edited by

                Excellent work @Art-of-B

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                • Whitney Simms
                  Whitney Simms SVS OG last edited by

                  @Art-of-B Your work is beyond my skill level to even leave a good suggestion. I simply adore this and can't wait to see the color!

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                  • kylebeaudette
                    kylebeaudette last edited by

                    Well, it's fantastic.
                    If I could critique anything, and it really doesn't need any... It would be to tone down the shapes/render on the young boy's hair. Simplify it on the interior and make the manic shapes on the edges only. It's a bit flame like, which always bothers me.
                    God, that dad is excellent. Your work is so clean. Perfecto!

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                    • Naters.Art
                      Naters.Art @braden H last edited by

                      @art-of-b It looks Fantastic! The lighting is spot on. as I look at it though my eye keeps falling off the page in the bottom left corner. I feel as though the dog is out of place (which is unfortunate because I really like it) but theres three things 1. the dog is so dark it pulls attention like a void. 2. the trumpet is pointing right to it with no payoff. 3. it's the only element breaking the boarder, all the other figures are framed within the scene really well. All in all though I think it's a winner.

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                      • chrisaakins
                        chrisaakins last edited by

                        @Art-of-B great job! I don't even think it needs color.

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                        • burvantill
                          burvantill Moderator last edited by

                          WOW! You are really forcing me to step up my game. LOL! The fellow artist in me LOVES this and can't wait to see the finish. The competitor in me is putting on her painting gloves....that was a stupid metaphor, I don't have painting gloves. My Grrr face! I'm putting that on. Lol. 👍😃

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                          • lmrush
                            lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                            Fantastic job!!!! Wow wow wow!!!!! My only comment is I was once taught your eye will go to the biggest contrast first (which is where you want your focal point to be) right now that is where the music stand meets the window. You want it to be on the boy, but not sure how to correct- Strong work you should be proud!

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                            • Gary Wilkinson
                              Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                              Late to the crit, but I really like this piece and there isn't a lot I can offer in terms of adjustment, a couple of things I wanted to mention though were:

                              The hanging picture of the music note seems as though there could be a better option for what could go into the frame. Perhaps that side doesn't even need a picture or it could be moved slightly to the upper right as to not be as prominent.

                              Also, something slightly bothers me about the foreshortening of the trombone and it's position in space.

                              I think it's a great piece though and excited to see the colors added to it. I'm guessing you use a multiply layer to add the colors, but what do you use to bring the lights back out? Overlay or normal?

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                              • Jabbernewt
                                Jabbernewt last edited by Jabbernewt

                                Loving the values, textures, and general comp, but I've noticed something about the trombone. It seems to be looped around his neck. By this I mean that, even if his neck is hidden by the shoulder, the tube of the trombone seems to snake its way around the right side and end up on the left side, which is not how the trombone is held. This might be fixed by overlapping the chin over the tubing, or by illustrating a little portion of his neck between the shoulder and head. Other than that, I remember loving the smaller details in the piece when I viewed it a few days ago. The little family photo especially, because it shows that the kid is usually pretty tame, with huge hair that covers his eyes and forehead; I just love the contrast between the photo representation of the kid and the craziness of the kid's trombone blast.

                                Also, the mouse-- what a phenomenal little detail! I love the humor!

                                Pax

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                                • braden H
                                  braden H last edited by

                                  Thank you all for the feedback! I tried to incorporate it as much as I could.

                                  @Gary-Wilkinson that darn treble clef picture does look out of place, doesn't it? I may do as you suggest later on and try and move it a little to make it a little less prominent.

                                  @Jabbernewt Arggh! You're right! And I looked at so much tromboney reference, too! That may need some surgery once I've got all the colour set in...

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                                  • braden H
                                    braden H last edited by

                                    Work continues! Time for the thing I need to work at most, colour! Gosh I hate colour... Hence why I now do everything in colour.

                                    Rough lighting colour study thingy

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                                    Rough colour

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                                    Aaaaaaaand colour WIP. Working from the background to the foreground. Almost finished working on the kid. Next come the animals.

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                                    • braden H
                                      braden H last edited by

                                      @Gary-Wilkinson

                                      As for colouring process, right now I use an overlay layer to throw in some light and a colourize layer for the local colour (I'm using painter. Photoshop I think has a 'colour' layer but it works a little different) Then I use a normal layer and just paint with the linework on a multiply layer overtop. Once I'm alllllmost done I'll flatten the linework and paint some highlights and stuff.

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                                      • kaitlinmakes
                                        kaitlinmakes last edited by

                                        Absolutely brilliant to show the light through the sheet music! I'm really enjoying watching this piece come together:)

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                                        • chrisaakins
                                          chrisaakins last edited by

                                          Love this. You really captured my struggles in 6th grade. You might want to lighten the value of the critter on the left. He is kinda hard to see. Unless it was intentional. I too think the lighting is amazing. Great job.

                                          Chris Akins
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                                          • Eric Castleman
                                            Eric Castleman last edited by

                                            Love it.

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