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    Contest piece for SCBWI MM conference

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    • RHirsch
      RHirsch @mag last edited by

      @mag One of the beauties of working digitally is I can play with this and see what happens. I'll give it a go, thanks!

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      • Justin Moss
        Justin Moss last edited by

        I'd have to agree with @demotlj . Perhaps raising the whole scene and placing her off the center of the line. showing she is leaving in a different direction and too far to receive another ice cream. It's just the composition that needs adjusting.

        The warm colors and almost watercolor painting is working very well. Especially juxtaposed with the simple character designs.

        Keep up the good work!

        Justin Moss
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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @RHirsch last edited by

          @RHirsch Quick cut and paste idea - i was thinking that if you flipped the line and made room for the little girl to be in the bottom right third of the painting it would allow the viewer to circle around the composition by way of the crowd - this would also put her in the midst of the crowd so you could have more reactions if you wanted to - just an idea though 🙂

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          • RHirsch
            RHirsch @Kevin Longueil last edited by

            @Kevin-Longueil Ooh, that's interesting. I'll try it.

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            • RHirsch
              RHirsch last edited by

              I made some changes. I'll have to let it sit overnight and look at it with fresh eyes tomorrow.
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              • RHirsch
                RHirsch last edited by

                Okay, with the dog, or without?
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                • sigross
                  sigross @RHirsch last edited by

                  @RHirsch I think the dog licking it would be better. Otherwise, at a glance the ice-cream looks like a dog sniffing poop.

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                  • Kevin Longueil
                    Kevin Longueil SVS OG @RHirsch last edited by

                    @RHirsch I think that it works better for me without the little dog.

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                    • RHirsch
                      RHirsch @sigross last edited by

                      @sigross @Kevin-Longueil Ha! That's not something I want people to think. Ok, no dog it is. All I have to do is remove one layer and he's gone...

                      www.rhirschillustration.com
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                      • burvantill
                        burvantill Moderator last edited by

                        Without the dog. 🙂

                        Lisa Burvant
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