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    • Sliproot
      Sliproot last edited by

      I've just finished this illustration. (it's meant to be black and white)
      Would love to hear what you guys think. Comments and crits welcome.

      "They wanted me to open the magic food door again."

      refrigerator.jpg

      https://www.instagram.com/sliproot

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        A Former User last edited by

        Awww this is so sweet! I love your characters so much and the composition is so lovely! πŸ˜ƒ
        The only thing that bugs me is the fridge door, to me its not reading as a fridge at the moment, maybe you could try having the fridge at a slight angle so we see more of the front? Or just reworking the angle of the door.
        Really love work though!

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        • MichaelaH
          MichaelaH @Guest last edited by

          @hannahmccaffery I had the same thought, I needed a lot of time to process, taht it is refrigator and he is holding the door.

          @Sliproot I love how the monster are looking inside, You have written "They wanted me to open the magic food door again." but again means, they already know what it looks inside and they love the inside, should not be the expression more really "wow" excited if it is the second time they are looking inside? I love that it is b/w, the shadows are great and very cute composition.

          https://www.instagram.com/michaelaheimlich/
          https://www.heimlich-illustration.de/

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          • Sliproot
            Sliproot @Guest last edited by

            @hannahmccaffery Thanks for the feedback! πŸ™‚

            Yeah I might play around with the fridge to make it look more fridge-like haha.

            @MichaelaH Also thanks for the feedback!

            I was trying to go with more curiosity and slightly intimidated rather than wow factor. But that is a good point. I might make some other monsters with more energetic personality types. Thanks again.

            https://www.instagram.com/sliproot

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              A Former User @Sliproot last edited by

              @Sliproot Ooh also, i would add a little white dot in all the animals eyes to show the light coming from the fridge πŸ™‚

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              • Sliproot
                Sliproot last edited by

                So this is the final.

                Thanks for all your help guys!

                refrigerator3.jpg

                https://www.instagram.com/sliproot

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                  A Former User last edited by

                  Awesome, just tweaking that fridge door has really changed the piece! I love it, it's so adorable and I'd love to see more of these characters πŸ˜ƒ

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                  • Phil Cullen
                    Phil Cullen last edited by

                    This looks so cute the creatures are great lovely shapes. I agree with was was mentioned already about the door and it is clearer here. One thing I would add though would be a little shade / shadow on the side of the fridge maybe a slight gradient from the lower right corner up, or darken it from the left side falling off towards the back of the fridge. I hope that made sense. nice piece tho great work πŸ™‚

                    www.instagram.com/phillip.cullen/
                    www.facebook.com/phillipcullenillustration/

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                    • burvantill
                      burvantill Moderator @Sliproot last edited by burvantill

                      @Sliproot that is adorable!!!
                      The tail of the lightest monster in front drags my eye away. Maybe, darken it a bit as it’s moving out of the light from the magic box.
                      πŸ‘β€οΈ

                      Edit: sorry. I just saw it was final. I missed the works in progress. 😊

                      Lisa Burvant
                      www.lisaburvant.com
                      Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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