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    • J
      jdubz last edited by

      At first glance, I think I like no branches. I think you've got a really strong focal point so the branches seem to detract from it is my initial gut feeling.

      Josh White
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      • peteolczyk
        peteolczyk @Coley last edited by peteolczyk

        @Coley wow I’m loving this Coley. I love the effect of the big Base of the tree trunk and the way it contrasts with the characters. I love the angle of the viewpoint and the Perspective you've got there too.
        I really like your characters too.

        I’m not quite sure which one I prefer, I like the effect of feeling that the viewer is up in the branches, but wonder if they need playing around with for composition.
        On Number2, I like the cleaner composition on this compared to the first
        Number 3. I can’t help feeling it’s too cropped but that’s just my personal feeling

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        • Coley
          Coley @KaraDaniel last edited by

          @KaraDaniel I was just using artistic licence and also thinking maybe it was spring with a snowfall. But you've got me thinking. I may add a few leaf buds on the tree branches, kind of symbolizes new beginnings and new love. 😁

          https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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          • Coley
            Coley @Julia Liberali last edited by

            @Julia-Liberali great idea for a potential place on the tree for text. Thank you!
            Given the prompt, maybe Will is my focal point so I understand what you mean about it being a bit confusing about where the focal point is. I will definitely have to think on this a lot more! I added the flower to his hand and kept it brighter than anything else in the illustration but maybe it's not enough. There's a lot of directional lines that don't lead to him. Anyhow, food for thought, I really appreciate your thoughts!

            https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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            • Coley
              Coley last edited by

              Thanks so much for the feedback @BichonBistro @chrisaakins @jdubz @peteolczyk . It's really great to hear what others think, much appreciated because I was having trouble getting away from it as we all do once we're a bit invested in our own stuff.
              Thanks again and happy weekend ❤️

              https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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              • chrisaakins
                chrisaakins last edited by chrisaakins

                @Coley I think if you placed the girl on the right third you would fix your composition. It would provide a solid focal point with her red dress. It would also make more sense. Right now it appears they are together and she's just exploring. If she was moved over it would heighten the sense that he is discovering her tracks and that they lead to her and to love.

                Chris Akins
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                • Coley
                  Coley @chrisaakins last edited by

                  @chrisaakins thanks Chris. I agree, I just wondered about her"leaving" the illustration. I know they typically say that's a no no. It might work tho if I have her head kind of turned back a little just glimpsing back tho. Hmmmm.
                  Thanks for that! P.s. I totally loved your December contest entry with Hansel and Gretel!

                  https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                  • chrisaakins
                    chrisaakins @Coley last edited by chrisaakins

                    @Coley Aww thanks! Maybe if it was obvious she is circling the tree or looking up at the birds. I think the large roundness of the tree works in your favor here because the eyes circle around its girth hoping to get her to the man.

                    Chris Akins
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                    • Coley
                      Coley last edited by Coley

                      if anyone is hanging around the forum and sees this, I did a little bit of work today. I moved the girl along and changed her gaze so she's looking kind of down (thought maybe then she's not looking out of the painting), but moving her I think made things a bit more balanced.
                      I might toy with making the tracks in the snow just regular tracks? I don't know if they need to be heart shaped seeing as the sign makes it quite clear it is the track of l.o.v.e lol 🙂
                      Januarylovewipl2.jpg

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                      • BichonBistro
                        BichonBistro @Coley last edited by BichonBistro

                        @Coley said in January WIP heart tracks:

                        if anyone is hanging around the forum and sees this, I did a little bit of work today. I moved the girl along and changed her gaze so she's looking kind of down (thought maybe then she's not looking out of the painting), but moving her I think made things a bit more balanced.
                        I might toy with making the tracks in the snow just regular tracks? I don't know if they need to be heart shaped seeing as the sign makes it quite clear it is the track of l.o.v.e lol 🙂
                        Januarylovewipl2.jpg

                        It does have a more balanced feel👍🏻 I think the heart tracks suit the text better than regular footprints. Maybe it's the romantic in me, but I see an inverted heart shape made by the lower branch, base of tree, girl's front and icicle ❤️
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                        • Coley
                          Coley @BichonBistro last edited by

                          @BichonBistro that's pretty cool!!! ❤️😁

                          https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                          • BichonBistro
                            BichonBistro @Coley last edited by

                            @Coley I'd say you put your heart into this one 😊

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                            • KaraDaniel
                              KaraDaniel last edited by

                              So cute! I like the heart shaped footprints. perfect for Valentine's day right around the corner ☺️

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                              • Lobalyss
                                Lobalyss last edited by

                                Your illustration is so lovely and cute, I love it 💞

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                                • Coley
                                  Coley @BichonBistro last edited by

                                  @BichonBistro lol!

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                                  • Coley
                                    Coley last edited by

                                    thanks @KaraDaniel and @Lobalyss 🙂

                                    https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                                    • Annaaronson
                                      Annaaronson last edited by

                                      This is so sweet. I love the work you put into it. I agree that it’s prefect for Valentines Day! Well done!

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                                      • deborah Haagenson
                                        deborah Haagenson last edited by

                                        Very nice! I'm just not sure if you need the little white icesicles hanging down from the branches. I think they might be a little distracting.

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                                        • Coley
                                          Coley @deborah Haagenson last edited by

                                          @deborah-Haagenson I was wondering that too. Gonna toy with removing them. Thanks ☺️

                                          https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                                          • Rachel Horne
                                            Rachel Horne @Coley last edited by

                                            @Coley this is super lovely!! I prefer the second image, I don’t think you need the branches at the top. ♥️

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