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    • Coley
      Coley @Julia Liberali last edited by

      @Julia-Liberali great idea for a potential place on the tree for text. Thank you!
      Given the prompt, maybe Will is my focal point so I understand what you mean about it being a bit confusing about where the focal point is. I will definitely have to think on this a lot more! I added the flower to his hand and kept it brighter than anything else in the illustration but maybe it's not enough. There's a lot of directional lines that don't lead to him. Anyhow, food for thought, I really appreciate your thoughts!

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      • Coley
        Coley last edited by

        Thanks so much for the feedback @BichonBistro @chrisaakins @jdubz @peteolczyk . It's really great to hear what others think, much appreciated because I was having trouble getting away from it as we all do once we're a bit invested in our own stuff.
        Thanks again and happy weekend ❀️

        https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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        • chrisaakins
          chrisaakins last edited by chrisaakins

          @Coley I think if you placed the girl on the right third you would fix your composition. It would provide a solid focal point with her red dress. It would also make more sense. Right now it appears they are together and she's just exploring. If she was moved over it would heighten the sense that he is discovering her tracks and that they lead to her and to love.

          Chris Akins
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          • Coley
            Coley @chrisaakins last edited by

            @chrisaakins thanks Chris. I agree, I just wondered about her"leaving" the illustration. I know they typically say that's a no no. It might work tho if I have her head kind of turned back a little just glimpsing back tho. Hmmmm.
            Thanks for that! P.s. I totally loved your December contest entry with Hansel and Gretel!

            https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins @Coley last edited by chrisaakins

              @Coley Aww thanks! Maybe if it was obvious she is circling the tree or looking up at the birds. I think the large roundness of the tree works in your favor here because the eyes circle around its girth hoping to get her to the man.

              Chris Akins
              www.chrisakinsart.com
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              • Coley
                Coley last edited by Coley

                if anyone is hanging around the forum and sees this, I did a little bit of work today. I moved the girl along and changed her gaze so she's looking kind of down (thought maybe then she's not looking out of the painting), but moving her I think made things a bit more balanced.
                I might toy with making the tracks in the snow just regular tracks? I don't know if they need to be heart shaped seeing as the sign makes it quite clear it is the track of l.o.v.e lol πŸ™‚
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                • BichonBistro
                  BichonBistro @Coley last edited by BichonBistro

                  @Coley said in January WIP heart tracks:

                  if anyone is hanging around the forum and sees this, I did a little bit of work today. I moved the girl along and changed her gaze so she's looking kind of down (thought maybe then she's not looking out of the painting), but moving her I think made things a bit more balanced.
                  I might toy with making the tracks in the snow just regular tracks? I don't know if they need to be heart shaped seeing as the sign makes it quite clear it is the track of l.o.v.e lol πŸ™‚
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                  It does have a more balanced feelπŸ‘πŸ» I think the heart tracks suit the text better than regular footprints. Maybe it's the romantic in me, but I see an inverted heart shape made by the lower branch, base of tree, girl's front and icicle ❀️
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                  • Coley
                    Coley @BichonBistro last edited by

                    @BichonBistro that's pretty cool!!! ❀️😁

                    https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                    • BichonBistro
                      BichonBistro @Coley last edited by

                      @Coley I'd say you put your heart into this one 😊

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                      • KaraDaniel
                        KaraDaniel last edited by

                        So cute! I like the heart shaped footprints. perfect for Valentine's day right around the corner ☺️

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                        • Lobalyss
                          Lobalyss last edited by

                          Your illustration is so lovely and cute, I love it πŸ’ž

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                          • Coley
                            Coley @BichonBistro last edited by

                            @BichonBistro lol!

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                            • Coley
                              Coley last edited by

                              thanks @KaraDaniel and @Lobalyss πŸ™‚

                              https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                              • Annaaronson
                                Annaaronson last edited by

                                This is so sweet. I love the work you put into it. I agree that it’s prefect for Valentines Day! Well done!

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                                • deborah Haagenson
                                  deborah Haagenson last edited by

                                  Very nice! I'm just not sure if you need the little white icesicles hanging down from the branches. I think they might be a little distracting.

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                                  • Coley
                                    Coley @deborah Haagenson last edited by

                                    @deborah-Haagenson I was wondering that too. Gonna toy with removing them. Thanks ☺️

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                                    • Rachel Horne
                                      Rachel Horne @Coley last edited by

                                      @Coley this is super lovely!! I prefer the second image, I don’t think you need the branches at the top. β™₯️

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                                      • Coley
                                        Coley @Rachel Horne last edited by

                                        @Rachel-Horne thanks so much πŸ™‚ I'm playing around with keeping some of them or removing them etc etc lol. I appreciate the feedback thank you πŸ™‚ !

                                        https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                                        • Coley
                                          Coley last edited by

                                          Some changes. Things are warmed up and flowers mostly removed and little twiggy alder sort of things poking through snow added. Background trees lowered. Realizing I need soft shadow under the characters. Going back and forth on branches or no branches! I like the depth they add but they're maybe a bit too angular? If anyone has thoughts on that let me know. And text or no text?
                                          The one with branches doesn't have some of the changes yet eg warming up of colors etc
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                                          • ArtofAleksey
                                            ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                            I like it but i dont know how i feel about a big sign with an arrow that says β€œlove” i think it would be more impactful as an illustration if it was telling me the same message without a sign.

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