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    Sketch for nightfall, would love some critique!

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    • Amelia Bothe
      Amelia Bothe last edited by

      Here's my sketch for the February contest "nightfall"! Any feedback appreciated! : -)

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      • EliaMurrayArt
        EliaMurrayArt last edited by

        Hello!

        This is an absolutely gorgeous start!! I love the feeling of the bugs rushing by. I can feel the flutter of their wings.

        My only recommendation would be to perhaps adjust the fox's legs - I feel like with the composition and the feeling of motion throughout the piece, the fox feels a little "slower" than the other parts. I think if you stretched his neck some more - and adjusted the feet so that they weren't all roughly at the same level that would help. I also think that if you turned the fox's tail up more (so it moved the opposite direction as the mouse's) that would create a fun flow through the composition. Since right now they are both pointing downwards.

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        Again - such a fabulous start!! Your drawing is beautiful and the movement is palpable . I can't wait to see the finished piece!

        All the best,
        Elia

        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/eliamurrayart/
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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Amelia Bothe last edited by

          @Amelia-Bothe My only feedback is that i Love it - super good drawing!!

          Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
          https://www.instagram.com/kevinlongueil/

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          • LauraA
            LauraA SVS OG last edited by

            It's a lovely sketch and I especially the action pose of the mouse. My only critique would be that it looks like the fox (I know it has another name) looks like it's hopping, so I'd follow Elia's suggestions above.

            I love all the different and creative takes people have on this prompt!

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            • Laurel Aylesworth
              Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

              Wow. This is awesome. All I got - lol

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              • Carrie
                Carrie last edited by

                Love your critters! I have horses and I appreciate the squirrels action...very realistic approach to riding. I think I would like the foxes eye to be open. Really like your background, too!

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                • braden H
                  braden H @Amelia Bothe last edited by

                  @Amelia-Bothe rodents on animal mounts always gets a win in my books 🙂

                  Anything technical I could give you would be nitpicky (and probably wrong, you've got an awesome knowledge of aminal anatomy).

                  But I do have questions: What's the story and what feelings are you trying to convey?

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                  • Coley
                    Coley last edited by

                    I am totally jealous lol, this is so awesome.

                    I fee like the pose of the "fox" is fine. I know the motion is slowed a bit like some have mentioned but in a way it sort of freezes the moment. It's obvious they]re going fast but to have the moment a little slowed down where the fox is suspended briefly is super cool to me anyhow.

                    i'm curious too on the story

                    https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                    • Amelia Bothe
                      Amelia Bothe @EliaMurrayArt last edited by

                      @EliaMurrayArt thank you so much for the feedback!!! These pics are great reference, I especially love the second ones pose wow. I really appreciate the advice and kind words!!

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                      • Amelia Bothe
                        Amelia Bothe @Carrie last edited by

                        @Carrie thank you!! My instinct says that if I open the fox’s eye his eyeline would lead the viewers eye off the page, but I think I’ll give it a try anyways because my instinct is usually wrong haha ^^

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                        • Amelia Bothe
                          Amelia Bothe @Coley last edited by

                          @Coley thank you so much!! The story was basically that predator (Fox) and prey (jerboa) come together at night to fight off a common evil (locusts.) : -) thank you for your interest!!

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                          • Rachel Horne
                            Rachel Horne last edited by

                            This is great. You can sense the speed, I love the birds in the background. I do agree about the fox, to me he seems like he’s jumping but altogether great so far!

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                            • Melanie Ortins
                              Melanie Ortins last edited by

                              Gorgeous! My only nitpick is that you could try maybe tilting the perspective to make it more dynamic and enhance the feeling of motion even more. And have the bugs flying at a bit of a different angle. Very horizontal compositions tend to feel more still and that counters a bit with your subject. I love your character designs though, they have so much personality! Fennec foxes and kangaroo rats are the best ☺

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                              • chrisaakins
                                chrisaakins last edited by chrisaakins

                                @Amelia-Bothe I love your characters. Desert animals are the best. What exactly is the kangaroo rat doing, though? He kinda looks like he is smelling his armpit when I look at it on my phone. One of the challenges I had during Inktober was drawing mice holding things over their head. Their big old heads get in the way. I posted an example of how I solved the issue. IMG_20191017_072010_668.jpg I think you are going to have to change the Jerboa's position a bit to make it work. Maybe tilt his body around more and raise his head up? I agree with the comments about changing the POV to a more dynamic slant. It always creates movement in a composition.

                                I really can't wait to see this finished. It inspires me to do more animal art.

                                Chris Akins
                                www.chrisakinsart.com
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