March Contest WIP critique welcome

demotlj

I’ve decided it takes longer to revise a painting than do a new one especially when life keeps getting in the way. In the interest of time, I decided to leave the characters on the right where they are but I’m going to try adding some dancers and servers on the left (that’s what the scribbles are.) I did work on the bison though.

TessaW

I think the changes make a big difference! It's much clearer that they are dancing. Love the adjustments you made to the bison. Possible tangent with the back foot?

demotlj

@TessaW Thanks. There are some other tangents too I have to clean up. There’s a lot of lines in this one!

chrisaakins

@demotlj Looking good! I think this is a real improvement in composition. I wouldn't crop the foot though.

demotlj

@chrisaakins I agree about the crop. I uncropped it after I put this up which also gives me more room for the other dancers I’m putting in.

demotlj

Is it clear now that the bison and other animals are dancing? If so, I think I’m done with the linework unless you see any issues. There are still a few tangents but I’ll trace it again when I put it onto watercolor and fix those, and try to make the line weight better.

Then comes the agony of choosing colors

chrisaakins

@demotlj looks great!

Coley

I have been enjoying this thread. the re-start on this piece is absolutely wonderful!!!! The characters are very endearing too.

demotlj

@Coley Thanks so much. It took me so long to do the piece the first time around that I wasn't sure I wanted to come back to it so it's encouraging to know it's working better.

demotlj

Do either of these color schemes work? The bison and prairie chicken will be warm browns and all the other animals are mostly cooler browns so I wasn’t sure whether to do stay with a analogous colors for the dance hall or go with the complimentary greens. If neither are working, let me know and I’ll go back to the drawing board.

Joanne Roberts

@demotlj Great job so far in your reworking. I'm having trouble judging if the cool green color scheme works better because that foreground bison is soooo dark. How is this piece matching up with the value thumbnails from your planning stage? Also having trouble because the black working lines of the background details are so stark right now in the all-brown version Maybe you'll have an easier time deciding if you temporarily tone down the line drawing a bit? I love your characters' gestures BTW.

demotlj

I made the bison that dark in the color study because I'm going to do it in traditional watercolor and I always have problems with my watercolors being too pale so I pushed the sketch so I'd remember. I'll try lightening her up as well as the lines tomorrow and reposting. Thanks for looking at it.

TessaW

Color is so subjective, but I like the brown version between the two. I think a green background could look just as attractive, but for my personal preference, I'd like a warmer green.

demotlj

@TessaW Who am I to go against the opinion of an SVS champion? Seriously, I do not trust my color sense at all and if you like the warmer colors, I will go with the warmer colors assuming the chaos of life right now leaves me any time to keep working on this. Thanks.