Hello these are illustrations I made as a test to reformat my children's movie into a children's book (if that needs to happen assuming that I nobody wants to buy my screenplay, EVER).
These illustrations were made way back in 2018 when I was still in college and dabbling in the idea of being an illustrator. I was proud when I first made these, but now that I have significantly improved these past months, I'd like some feedback on how I can improve them. I feel like I can make that decision myself, but your opinion matters too! Because if they cannot cater to an audience who can they cater to? Myself lol?
Here are the illustrations below, I can actually critique some of them myself. I just need some additional input, because I cannot always rely on my introspection skills.
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These are illustrations of an Igorot man and a Yakan woman from pre-colonial Philippines, intended to teach the reader about the way of life before the country ever existed. I was really proud of how I shaded the Igorot man, but I guess one problem that I can see now is simply just how I feathered out the water. Now that I understand how to use textured brushes that should be a simple fix. The 'nilad' plants beside him always bothered me, but I could never put my finger on it, but now I realize it's because it doesn't have quite the same color harmony as the rest of the piece.
Regarding the Yakan woman, the biggest issue I always knew I had with this piece but hoped could get away with was her pose with her legs. I just couldn't figure the perspective to make it look like her legs are flat at the floor, but it ended up looking like we're looking at her from above. There's an obvious disconnect between her legs and the yarn beside her.
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Again this was when I didn't know how to use texture brushes so this backdrop and the thing that cuts off their torsos end up looking sloppy and amateur (because I was an amateur 2 years ago). I wanted it to look like the man and wife are hugging really tight with their kids in between, but it's more tender than tight. The boy kind of conveys that idea, but not well enough. Also yeah his arm is dislocated from his body π
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what can I say?
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This piece was inspired by the pieces shown below. This scene was meant to convey how when the Philippines was on the brink of colonization, the Spaniards came to "take away the livelihood of the country" and thus lack of color. I feel like the issues sort of speak for themself in this one. The aeta man blends in with the woman's dress. The conch guy was sloppily put together. Etc.
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I think this piece ended up still being okay. A little too dark, but otherwise conveys the message perfectly. What would you fix about this piece?