@TessaW What a great critique! Thank you so much.....I could have changed the body language for sure to amp up the emotion and tension of the situation, which would add to the comic. Thanks again.

@Chip-Valecek Thanks a lot. Good idea about the kids... I'll see if i can squeeze some in 🙂

I'm loving the second one, in color. It helps direct my eye throughout the scene setting. Also, in the first one, in order to execute the texture of the trees in the background, I think it causes too much ink noise. Therefore, the watercolor helps minimize the use of inked texture and lets the color do the talking. Well done, looks great!

Great job, I enjoy watching your process on the pirate pieces.

@NessIllustration Haha yeah everyone has a different perspective! Is that a pun? oh lord..

@TessaW Ooh yeah I love cool down drawings. You always feel like you're on top of the world by that point hahahah. These look great!

Getting close to finished!

This version is sans election and given some detail love.
Edit: I also subdued the farther away peers for atmospheric perspective.

If there’s something you notice that would help dial It in the final refining stretch I’d get your eye-pinion. 😄

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And thanks to everyone for your critiques and ideas that have been so helpful getting it this far! You’re the best!!

@chrisaakins

"and I think I am overthinking it. I just need to let it be a black and white piece. Thanks everyone! @demotlj @Braden-Hallett @TessaW @lou @Aleksey @theprairiefox and everyone else who commented!"

Note I just noticed this last post of yours, but I still wanted to chime in.

Hey. So I too prefer the black and white but I do really like the additional subtle colours in the white mouse. The green is distracting. If you returned to the black and white and added subtle colour details to the white mouse (as you have in this one) and add subtle colours to the other two grey ones (not some much yellow -similar to the feel of the white mouse), I think those changes would give it the little boost.

🙂

I love that you have brought so much of the story in with such simplicity. Like the difference between Papa and Mama bears beds (hard and soft). It really adds without getting in the way.

The one thing I would say is you might want to push the values a little further apart for objects that are really close to each other. When I squint it down, I lose details like the door handle and Papa and Mama's beds blend into each other.

With so little in the picture, you want to make sure everything stands out.

Just my 2 cents. Nice work.

@kanari-illust thank you Kanari, I think you are right, it’s not so obvious that it’s a moon. The partial moon would have to really shout moon at you, maybe with craters or a moon like glow or some stars hanging around. Or perhaps the bottom point of the crescent could be visible.
Also I’m glad you pointed out about the first one with the door. Originally I thought she could be getting the impossibly sized moon out of her bag, Mary Poppins style, but I didn’t feel this would work with the composition. I should just give it a shot.
I think I’ll do some more thumbnails.
Thanks again

@Shara-Mills ah, wow, thanks 🙂

for the expressions, I initally had them looking frightened but it seemed a bit too scary, so I made them happy, I'll work for something in between!

I'm actually considering starting over another new one lol! Will see what happens, I had another idea. But maybe I'll end up doing both (submitting only one of course lol).

I agree with Tessa that the jealous and pleased expressions are clear, but for the competition prompt where everyone was “shocked” might call for some classmates or other characters to convey the shock called for.

Cute concept and kid versions of Galinda and Elphaba.

@TwiggyT My daughter had lice. Ugh! I cut her hair really short and she started dressing like a boy. All the kids called her Bob for a few years. She is now a Mom with a five year old son. She is a girl again 🙂

I like both ideas. If you choose to do the robot, I like the one with the girl on it's shoulder and kids all around.

The flamingo would be a lot of fun.

@TessaW @chrisaakins Thank you, I'm glad you like it! 😃
@Zachary-Drenski Glad to hear you like the changes! Thanks for your feedback, I probably would have missed them if you hadn't pointed them out 🙏

Thanks y'all!
@Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen Thanks, and you're welcome! With this project, I decided to just share the whole process from start to finish. It's going to be a good ride I hope!
@Nyrryl-Cadiz I know right? I was like, "it's a fairy tale, love this story and know it by heart, I need a smaller project after that oracle deck (just completed a 44-card oracle deck for Blue Angel Publishing.)" But, once I really dove in, realized what a grand story it really can be, and I had a vision from the beginning of what I wanted the reader to experience, so am just going to go for it. Some of these are quite complicated too, but I'm going to learn a lot (already am), and I think come out with something pretty special. <fingers crossed>
@demotlj Thank you! It makes it even more fun knowing the structure of the whole thing from the beginning. There were a lot of points, I was tempted to start getting to the art before the whole thing was laid out, but I stuck through it, and am glad I did.

It made me a little sad to read that you were demotivated because of lack of appreciation on social media-the art you have made here is really really hard to do, and most people perhaps don't realize this. Do not let others demotivate you, make art that makes you happy. You should be happy and proud about this piece you have made. I know you did it for lighting but I also wanted to share a tip I once learned in an art class about portraits; I was taught to make a grid over the original, then on your paper draw the grid and then draw/fill in, it works to help keep proportions on point. Happy creating!

@chrisaakins thanks for the idea. I bought a gold pen the other day, will play around with that. I think it's a gel pen (pen and ink is new to me). I guess a paint pen is probably different, I'll look it up, not a lot of art supplies where I live so I have to order stuff in! although we have Staples here, maybe there would be something there if gold pen doesn't' work. I am planning on coloring the illustration in photoshop later anyhow.....so much to expiriment with 🙂

Hair from A, the rest from B. ❤

Am already kind of having a lot of fun with this. I've heard that an octopus is as intelligent as a kitten, so why not have an octopus pet? Once I started sketching, I was thinking how useful it would be to have a friendly pet octopus, I mean they got all those arms to hold your pencils and books, and whatnot! Plus, so many hugs! I bet they could draw pretty well too if they put their octo brain to it. 😉

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