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    Critique on my new piece WIP: Lotus seed harvest

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      A Former User @xin li last edited by

      @xin-li no problem, at the end its easier to show it this way then to explain it in words .i just wanted to show how some lil tweaks can change it and now its up to you to go your way in term of lightning/shadow. so far its on a good way in my opinion.

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      • xin li
        xin li last edited by

        Hi, everyone.
        Here is my "amlost final" version for this piece.
        Does the color gets a bit muddy?
        Any critiques on the characters? I always struggle with the character painting.
        Harvest_Lotus_02.jpg

        Web: www.lixin.no
        IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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        • TessaW
          TessaW last edited by TessaW

          I don't think it looks muddy at all. The color is really beautiful and the characters look great. Maybe the mom would only have one longer paddle or pushing pole? I think the rowing style for two paddles, the mom would be facing the other way in order to propel the boat forward? Maybe it doesn't matter though- I know everything doesn't have to be accurate to make a good illustration.

          Website: www.tessawrathall.com

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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @xin li last edited by

            @xin-li I like your colors. The skin colors compliment nicely with the green surroundings.

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            • Julia
              Julia @xin li last edited by

              @xin-li I love it! Good luck!

              https://www.instagram.com/julia.nsw/

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              • xin li
                xin li @TessaW last edited by

                @TessaW thank you so much for pointing out about the paddle. I think it is really important to get that detail right, to paint a believable world. I knew nothing about rowing a boat :-), looking at youtube video now. I remmber once an art mentor pointing a mouse character I drew and asked me "hmmm, he has a huge head, how would he be able to put on a t-shirt. I suggest you give him a shirt with buttons instead." I was enlightened that day :-).

                Web: www.lixin.no
                IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                • xin li
                  xin li last edited by

                  @Nyrryl-Cadiz @Julia thank you so much.

                  Web: www.lixin.no
                  IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                  • xin li
                    xin li last edited by xin li

                    I changed to one long paddle for mamma. Thank you so much @TessaW

                    I still got some days before the deadline for submission. I will let the piece sit for a day or two now. Let me know if you have any more thoughts, comments :-).
                    Harvest_Lotus_03.jpg

                    Web: www.lixin.no
                    IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                    • marek.halko
                      marek.halko last edited by

                      The colors are beautiful! Not mudy at all. Nice value and color contrasts! Very cool image!

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                      • xin li
                        xin li @marek.halko last edited by

                        @marek-halko thank you so much

                        Web: www.lixin.no
                        IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                        • TessaW
                          TessaW @xin li last edited by TessaW

                          @xin-li I was just typing a reply, when you responded with the update! I got on a kick looking at boats and paddles 😜 Looks like they do have a rowing forward style boat with two paddles: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XJ4Fujsr274&t=66s They just cross them and have a stick at each side to hold them in place.

                          I do really like the latest change though, I feel it gives it more movement leading into the piece.

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                          • Coley
                            Coley last edited by

                            It's very, very beautiful ❤️

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                            • Heather Boyd
                              Heather Boyd @xin li last edited by Heather Boyd

                              @xin-li I like how you have change the colour intensity and value of the dragonfly on the right to cut down on it as a distraction. This clearly must only be me but I find it still a tad distracting because of it's size. Anyways I have no other issues with it. I think it's lovely and a wonderful glimmer glimpse of someone else's upbringing.

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                              Be blessed,

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                              • xin li
                                xin li @Heather Boyd last edited by xin li

                                @Heather-Boyd thank you for your feedback. I will play around with the size of the dragonfly and see how I feel about it :-).
                                @Coley thank you so much.

                                Web: www.lixin.no
                                IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                                • idid
                                  idid last edited by

                                  that looks wonderful !

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                                    Mara Price @xin li last edited by

                                    @xin-li It's beautiful!

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                                    • xin li
                                      xin li last edited by

                                      I got in the runner-up list with this piece on the contest (https://www.picturehooks.org.uk/event/picture-hooks-competition/).

                                      Thank you so much for helping out. Always so nice to discuss my WIPs on the forum here.

                                      Web: www.lixin.no
                                      IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                                      • Julia
                                        Julia @xin li last edited by

                                        @xin-li congratulations! You did a good job, it is well deserved

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                                        • jsnzart
                                          jsnzart @xin li last edited by

                                          @xin-li CONGRATS!!! So cute!

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                                          • Coreyartus
                                            Coreyartus Moderator last edited by

                                            Congratulations! I saw the post on Instagram!! Woohooo!

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