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    Critique on my new piece WIP: Lotus seed harvest

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    • TessaW
      TessaW last edited by TessaW

      I don't think it looks muddy at all. The color is really beautiful and the characters look great. Maybe the mom would only have one longer paddle or pushing pole? I think the rowing style for two paddles, the mom would be facing the other way in order to propel the boat forward? Maybe it doesn't matter though- I know everything doesn't have to be accurate to make a good illustration.

      Website: www.tessawrathall.com

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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @xin li last edited by

        @xin-li I like your colors. The skin colors compliment nicely with the green surroundings.

        Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
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        • Julia
          Julia @xin li last edited by

          @xin-li I love it! Good luck!

          https://www.instagram.com/julia.nsw/

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          • xin li
            xin li @TessaW last edited by

            @TessaW thank you so much for pointing out about the paddle. I think it is really important to get that detail right, to paint a believable world. I knew nothing about rowing a boat :-), looking at youtube video now. I remmber once an art mentor pointing a mouse character I drew and asked me "hmmm, he has a huge head, how would he be able to put on a t-shirt. I suggest you give him a shirt with buttons instead." I was enlightened that day :-).

            Web: www.lixin.no
            IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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            • xin li
              xin li last edited by

              @Nyrryl-Cadiz @Julia thank you so much.

              Web: www.lixin.no
              IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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              • xin li
                xin li last edited by xin li

                I changed to one long paddle for mamma. Thank you so much @TessaW

                I still got some days before the deadline for submission. I will let the piece sit for a day or two now. Let me know if you have any more thoughts, comments :-).
                Harvest_Lotus_03.jpg

                Web: www.lixin.no
                IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                • marek.halko
                  marek.halko last edited by

                  The colors are beautiful! Not mudy at all. Nice value and color contrasts! Very cool image!

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                  • xin li
                    xin li @marek.halko last edited by

                    @marek-halko thank you so much

                    Web: www.lixin.no
                    IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                    • TessaW
                      TessaW @xin li last edited by TessaW

                      @xin-li I was just typing a reply, when you responded with the update! I got on a kick looking at boats and paddles 😜 Looks like they do have a rowing forward style boat with two paddles: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XJ4Fujsr274&t=66s They just cross them and have a stick at each side to hold them in place.

                      I do really like the latest change though, I feel it gives it more movement leading into the piece.

                      Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                      Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                      • Coley
                        Coley last edited by

                        It's very, very beautiful ❤️

                        https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                        • Heather Boyd
                          Heather Boyd @xin li last edited by Heather Boyd

                          @xin-li I like how you have change the colour intensity and value of the dragonfly on the right to cut down on it as a distraction. This clearly must only be me but I find it still a tad distracting because of it's size. Anyways I have no other issues with it. I think it's lovely and a wonderful glimmer glimpse of someone else's upbringing.

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                          Be blessed,

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                          • xin li
                            xin li @Heather Boyd last edited by xin li

                            @Heather-Boyd thank you for your feedback. I will play around with the size of the dragonfly and see how I feel about it :-).
                            @Coley thank you so much.

                            Web: www.lixin.no
                            IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                            • idid
                              idid last edited by

                              that looks wonderful !

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                              • M
                                Mara Price @xin li last edited by

                                @xin-li It's beautiful!

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                                • xin li
                                  xin li last edited by

                                  I got in the runner-up list with this piece on the contest (https://www.picturehooks.org.uk/event/picture-hooks-competition/).

                                  Thank you so much for helping out. Always so nice to discuss my WIPs on the forum here.

                                  Web: www.lixin.no
                                  IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                                  • Julia
                                    Julia @xin li last edited by

                                    @xin-li congratulations! You did a good job, it is well deserved

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                                    • jsnzart
                                      jsnzart @xin li last edited by

                                      @xin-li CONGRATS!!! So cute!

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                                      • Coreyartus
                                        Coreyartus Moderator last edited by

                                        Congratulations! I saw the post on Instagram!! Woohooo!

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                                        • Coley
                                          Coley @xin li last edited by

                                          @xin-li oooo so wonderful, congratulations!

                                          https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                                          • eriberart
                                            eriberart last edited by

                                            I saw this on their Instagram! Congrats 😊

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