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    • Jeremy Ross
      Jeremy Ross @ellenseal_art last edited by

      Hi @ellenseal14, what a fun piece! Personally, I like “D” the best because the main characters draw my attention the most. I feel like you’re using rule of thirds nicely.

      Can’t wait to see your final piece!

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      • ajillustrates
        ajillustrates @ellenseal_art last edited by

        @ellenseal14 Personally, I like A the best because I'm not afraid of centered compositions, and because it's the only thumbnail that has evil plants on either side behind her, which makes stakes higher. You could even have her little sidekick looking off to the right, which would sell that they feel surrounded.

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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @ellenseal_art last edited by

          @ellenseal14 I've struggled with the fact that i like A best too - it is a centered composition but i think it looks perfect. This would make a very nice book cover if you extended the canvas up and down a bit to an 8 x 10 ratio. I am wondering if i am thinking that because it is centered?? - super nice drawings!!

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          • ellenseal_art
            ellenseal_art @Kevin Longueil last edited by

            @Kim-Rosenlof @Jeremy-Ross @ajillustrates @Kevin-Longueil Thank you all so much for your feedback! Looks like 1 vote B, 1 vote D, and 2 votes A. At least I can eliminate C. 🙂

            I like A but was scared to go with something centered - great idea to flip the sidekick though! I'd also probably arch the plants a bit more towards her to frame her.

            On the other hand, I like how she's moving through the space in D. Both options are from different points in time - so this would be when she's just arrived whereas A would be after she sits to rest (maybe I'd add the bitten apple in there from B so perhaps they're pissed at her for biting a fruit...)

            Hmm...decisions decisions. Thanks again!

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            • TaniaGomesArt
              TaniaGomesArt last edited by TaniaGomesArt

              I like A the best for what you are trying to tell. It's the one where I feel the danger of the plants the most. I'm personally not bothered with centered compositions, but if you think is a problem, you may extend the canvas vertically a bit and kind of make the plants bend a little, like they are trying to get to her. But I like it as it is to be honest.

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              • ellenseal_art
                ellenseal_art @TaniaGomesArt last edited by

                @TaniaGomesArt Thank you! A is one of the options I'm leaning towards so that really helps.

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                • KevinTreaccar
                  KevinTreaccar last edited by

                  A and D are my favorites. I like the surrounded feel of A, though her head disappears into the darker wall to me since her hair seems to be a similar tone. I think I like the contrast around her head in D and wonder if bringing its door to A would make A a clear winner.

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                  • ellenseal_art
                    ellenseal_art last edited by

                    Thanks everyone who helped me out with this one! Here's where I'm at now. Any last minute things I should fix that I'm not noticing?

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                    • ajillustrates
                      ajillustrates @ellenseal_art last edited by

                      @ellenseal14 Looking lovely! A recommendation to think about: add some lightning out the wind to joing the rainstorm, which would justify putting some dramatic halo-backlighting on the monster plants, girl's hair, and pet's snout.

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                      • ellenseal_art
                        ellenseal_art @ajillustrates last edited by

                        @ajillustrates Haha...I'll try it! Lighting is not my strong suit so I'm unsure I'll pull it off. Worth experimenting with though - thanks!

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