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    • mymightypencil
      mymightypencil last edited by

      My 1st draft of Riley. Feedback welcome. Peace and love from the UK.IMG_0116.jpg

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      • jenn
        jenn @mymightypencil last edited by

        @mymightypencil this is a fun take on the subject!

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        • Miriam
          Miriam @mymightypencil last edited by Miriam

          @mymightypencil The garage IS the project! That's a fun take on the prompt.

          It looks great!

          A couple little bits of advice to consider:

          • You might want to give that little moon at the bottom more 'space' šŸ˜‰ by moving the line between lighter & darker blue, or moving the moon to overlap the line.
          • Riley's expression seems very understated. (Insert friendly poke about Brits not showing emotion.) šŸ™‚
            The low, downward slanted brows, and the low cheeks lean slightly toward a sad or somber feeling, but she does look pleased, or maybe like she's marveling at the sights.
            ‑ You might want to try moving the eyebrows or adding a curve to make them friendlier / happier.
            ‑ You could experiment with moving the cheeks up — closer to the eyes. I think that on its own would brighten up her expression (but I'm not sure if that would leave too much empty space at the bottom of her face).
            ‑ You also could consider lightening the cheeks.
            ‑ Moving the mouth down could also change the expression.

          Here are some little tweaks for comparison:
          Untitled.jpg

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          • mymightypencil
            mymightypencil @Miriam last edited by

            @miriam that's so kind of you to take your time to give that feedback šŸ™‚ thank you. You're absolutely right about her expression, so I've made her ever so slightly happier ☺ and played with the layout of her face a little too.

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