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    • Heather Boyd
      Heather Boyd @von_Nimmermehr last edited by Heather Boyd

      @von_Nimmermehr Hi!

      I love the different and easily recognizable fun levels. Except I cannot tell what the the top identifies with, are you pointing to something specific? EDIT: is it suppose to be a flying UFO?

      Concerning your perspective, where is horizon line? I ask because I can see a lot of the top portion of the deck in the upper level and very little on the last circus level. If I can't see much of the top I think it's at eye level but then I should see the underneath portion of the top level deck. Do you understand what I am trying to explain? Then you can go through and adjust the other parts. Also the top level looks like it's on a tilt, is that on purpose?

      I'd also adjust the top level a bit more to the right, to balance the weight on the left. And maybe lessen the tree foliage on the middle level on the right side, as you add a tiny more weight in tree foliage on the top level (but it may be okay if you move the top level over a bit).

      I love the design of the trunk portion! Keep going, I am excited!!!

      Heather

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      • Johanna Kim
        Johanna Kim SVS OG @von_Nimmermehr last edited by Johanna Kim

        @von_Nimmermehr Love how this is looking already, especially your dynamic line work and interesting shapes. Like @Heather-Boyd mentioned, maybe take a look at where your camera eye is. It feels like it's midway up the tree. If that's the case, we would see more of the floor of the carousel, and the bottom of the deck of the topmost level. But then, we're also dealing with how the various structures are attaching to the tree.

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        • Pamela Fraley
          Pamela Fraley SVS OG @Asyas_illos last edited by

          @Asyas_illos Wow! Thatโ€™s looking cool. I has a sort of โ€œJolly Roger flying through the skyโ€ vibe to it. I would hang out there. ๐Ÿ™‚

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos @Pamela Fraley last edited by

            @Pamela-Fraley I think you meant to tag @von_Nimmermehr ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜‰

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            • Pamela Fraley
              Pamela Fraley SVS OG @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

              @von_Nimmermehr Oh yea! Oops! ๐Ÿ˜„

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              • Pamela Fraley
                Pamela Fraley SVS OG @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                @von_Nimmermehr That comment was for you! haha. Love your design!

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                • von_Nimmermehr
                  von_Nimmermehr last edited by von_Nimmermehr

                  So, after qritique arena, and seeing other people just having kind of the same idea as me (no hard feelings, i guess it was kind of obvious) I wanted to give it another try.

                  I kind of liked the ship idea and i thougt it could be nice to have a tree thats looks like waves.

                  • Do you think i got the perspective right?
                    I kind of struggeled here, because the form of the ship is kind of challenging for me.
                  • would you say, the dynamic/flow is okay here.

                  you can just draw over if you feel the need. I learn better visually.

                  since the critique arena is over, it's just about finishing a portfolio piece, because i alsway quit...but i want to have some finished portfolio pieces by the end of the year.

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                  • AngelinaKizz
                    AngelinaKizz @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                    @von_Nimmermehr looks really great so far!!!

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                    • von_Nimmermehr
                      von_Nimmermehr @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                      @AngelinaKizz Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚

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                      • von_Nimmermehr
                        von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                        here is my progress so far, im really enjoying my progress here.

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                        • von_Nimmermehr
                          von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                          can anyone help me out with the part of the ship i encircled?

                          I don't know why i struggle so much with this part รด_o
                          i tried it a few times now but it seems off to me

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                          • KevinTreaccar
                            KevinTreaccar @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                            @von_Nimmermehr I think the top line of your shipโ€™s elevated platform is too sloped.

                            Basically, as I imagine a straight line coming out of the front of the ship as well as the flat wall you have boxed, I see the lines. Or quite pointing in the same direction. The second level line looks to me like it would be point a little to the left based upon the direction that second level cubeโ€™s side is facing.

                            Is that making any sense?

                            Everything else looks correct to me.

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                            • von_Nimmermehr
                              von_Nimmermehr @KevinTreaccar last edited by

                              @KevinTreaccar

                              i dont think so, it fits perfectly into my grid i worked with.
                              Maybe i made something wrong thoug?

                              But i was more talking of the raling in the back...i cant figure it out thoug and also i dont know what to do with the front of the "box". just a window (I don't like the window Idea, since there already is a window)? Or a door? how big should a door be? Or how hight, i am sitting on that part for so long now its ridiculous

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                              • von_Nimmermehr
                                von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                                im getting closer to finish this peace....at least i didn't gibve up though.

                                Have you any recommendations how i can push the values more? i seems its just all the same values or maybe thats something i can fix later?

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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                                  @von_Nimmermehr oh wow I love how the tree looks like waves!

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                                  • ?
                                    A Former User @von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                                    @von_Nimmermehr I love the concept and the drawing is very lovely.

                                    Have you tried to lighten the value of the tree leaves/waves? That might make the boat pop more for the viewer.

                                    Such a lovely piece, excited to see where you take it.

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                                    • von_Nimmermehr
                                      von_Nimmermehr last edited by

                                      Thanks @Asyas_illos i really fell in love with this idea and im happy i got it to work though.

                                      @Stephanie-H i made the colors of the leaves a bit brighter, also i changes the color to a liiiiittle bit more saturated.

                                      i think i'm about to finish it. I will sleep over it and take a look at it tomottow again with some fresh eyes.

                                      Do you think it's a portfolio piece? It would be my very first portfolio piece. for now i'm quite happy, i finished it or at least am about to ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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                                        Mara Price @Guest last edited by

                                        @Stephanie-H It's beautiful

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                                          • von_Nimmermehr
                                            von_Nimmermehr @Guest last edited by

                                            @Stephanie-H love the Idea, havent thought of it but would look cute and cozy i guess. Thanks

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