Hey Looking for a Critique on this WIP

[NizhoniWolf]

Personally, I would have planned out the illustration to have more space available for the words. @Jon-Anderson mentioned moving the pirate over so he over laps the island a bit (to create more depth perception) but i also feel this would free up some natural space for those words

[Jason Bowen]

@jon-anderson Thanks for your idea. I was planning it out as a double page spread and I am a little unsure whether you should ignore the fold of the page or not... I will have to play a bit with the positions.

[TessaW]

@jason-bowen Ah, I see. In that case, I think you've gone a bit too gray and dark for the mist. What time of day is this? Do you mind if I attempt a paint over?

[Jon Anderson]

@jason-bowen If your goal is a two page spread I would leave the pirate so that he isn't broken up and add something relevant on the right side to still overlap and help with depth. Making the island wider may help with that too and would not interfere with the page break so long as you have enough of it showing on the left side that it isn't awkward looking. You just definitely don't want to put your focal point right at the page break.

[Jason Bowen]

@tessaw go for it

[Jason Bowen]

@tessaw I didn't have a time of day really. Was just thinking light haha

[Jason Bowen]

@nizhoniwolf thanks, the words are a problem I need to solve

[Jason Bowen]

I had a brain wave and drained the water a bit to give me space at the top I'm still working on the mist I need some time away from this picture haha

[TessaW]

Ok, I did a rough paint-over. I personally felt your values could be grouped a bit different so that your pirate could stand out better. I also incorporated other's suggestions. The saturation levels are my personal preference, and I think a more muted palette would work as well!

Anyway, just my thoughts.

[Jason Bowen]

@tessaw Thanks a lot for the quick paint over! It has given me some great ideas I will post my progress

[Jason Bowen]

I have done some more playing with this painting I am going to move on to the next page and see if I can create a book out of this.