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    December prompt WIP - feedback welcome!

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    • Neha Rawat
      Neha Rawat last edited by

      Hi everyone!
      This month's prompt is so versatile in terms of emotions, it took me a while to settle down on one idea!
      I've chosen sadness / pain as a mood. The scene is of a little girl in a hospital gown with drips attached to her, who is overhearing her parents talking to the doctor outside her room. The parents are are crying from hearing some painful news by the doctor.
      I also decided to add some christmas decoration in the room just to emphasise the contrast.
      I plan to have the room mostly in shadow with light entering from the crack in the door and the blinds.
      I still have to stylise the characters of the parents and the doctor so this is just a placeholder.
      Also, I'm not sure if the room looks enough like a hospital room. I decided to add the drips to the girl to make it obvious that she is a patient. But other than that, everything is cropped off (the bed/chart/some hospital machine on the right). Does this work?
      Would appreciate feedback!
      Thanks!

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      • LauraA
        LauraA SVS OG last edited by

        I think it works! I suspected it was a hospital situation (blinds, clipboard, chart, kind of handle on door), and then the drips confirmed it. I almost wonder if it could be cropped a bit more, but not sure. It's a nice sketch!

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        • Laurel Aylesworth
          Laurel Aylesworth @Neha Rawat last edited by

          @Neha-Rawat Oh this is devastating. I like how you were sparing in your details of the hospital room. My eye went to the edge of the bed and I thought "wait, that's not a normal bed frame." Then my eye went up to the IV bags, which are nice and simple. And the contrast to the Xmas decorations. Oof. This is going to be impactful. Looking forward to see this develop.

          www.laurelaylesworth.com
          instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

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          • deborah Haagenson
            deborah Haagenson last edited by

            I really like the composition and the sketch. It will be fun to see your final piece! Maybe she's overhearing good news, not bad 😰! I'll hope so anyway!

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            • deborah Haagenson
              deborah Haagenson @deborah Haagenson last edited by

              @deborah-Haagenson I just looked at her facial expression and it does't look like good news - Great Job!

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              • Basil Godevenos
                Basil Godevenos last edited by

                Oh wow. This is very powerful.

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                • Neha Rawat
                  Neha Rawat last edited by

                  Hi everyone

                  Somehow I was more excited about making this illustration before I started it. It looked really good in my head but I’m. It convinced that I’ve translated it like that in the drawing. I’m not sure about the lighting and values . Do you think the emotion is coming through in terms of the lighting and expressions?
                  Any suggestions on how I can make the background character better?
                  Feedback always appreciated! πŸ™‚

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                  https://www.nrbstudio.in/
                  https://www.instagram.com/nrbstudio.in

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                  • burvantill
                    burvantill Moderator @Neha Rawat last edited by

                    @Neha-Rawat i think the lighting is very good.πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
                    The Xmas tree is throwing me off though. Environment wise. I don’t know if a large tree would be allowed in a hospital room so it makes me question where she is. Maybe toned down the Xmas stuff (small tree in a table?) and add a bit more hospital room equipment. Every hospital room I’ve been in is crowded with bins. Hazmat, trash, linen etc. A hazmat bin with the hazmat symbol in the dark corner behind the door might help emphasize β€œhospital”. This is a very emotional piece. Looking forward to seeing the end product. πŸ‘πŸ™‚

                    Lisa Burvant
                    www.lisaburvant.com
                    Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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                    • Neha Rawat
                      Neha Rawat last edited by

                      Thanks for the feedback @burvantill . Adding more hospital elements actually made a lot of sense. I don’t know why I was giving the tree so much importance.
                      Also, I realised the value of the characters outside the room was way off and I’ve actually increased contrast on them and I think it looks much better.
                      What do you guys think?

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                      https://www.nrbstudio.in/
                      https://www.instagram.com/nrbstudio.in

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                      • burvantill
                        burvantill Moderator @Neha Rawat last edited by

                        @Neha-Rawat πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ˜ƒ

                        Lisa Burvant
                        www.lisaburvant.com
                        Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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                        • Debra Garcia
                          Debra Garcia @Neha Rawat last edited by

                          @Neha-Rawat The new equipment replacing the tree is perfect; very well done.

                          I'm struggling with the dad's posture. I can't quite figure out what plane he's on. The might be a good one to have a couple of friends pose for to get some good reference.

                          This fits the prompt perfectly, the little girl is just adorable, and you can tell exactly what they're all thinking and feeling. The Christmas decorations and another powerful layer of emotion, and I just love it!

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                          Art isn't life, life is art.

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                          • xin li
                            xin li last edited by

                            This has come a long way, so cool to see it developed. Love the changes you have done with the room decorations.

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