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    December WIP - feedback really appreciated

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    • xin li
      xin li last edited by

      Thank you so much. So many constructive and actionable feedback.
      @Kevin-Longueil @Coley Thank you so much. I will play a bit more with the design of the moon.
      @idid @peteolczyk thank you. I hope I get to finish this one before the end of the month :-).
      @danielerossi I had one more image with these 2 characters I have done earlier this year. I have no story for them yet. But I want to develop a few sequential images for my portfolio, to make it looks like it could be a book :-),
      @Debra-Garcia Really good catch with the tangents. I will definitely work on that.
      @Neha-Rawat I want to avoid having a straight line for the floor, to add a bit more energy. But maybe it is too much. I will try out another way.

      Web: www.lixin.no
      IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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      • xin li
        xin li last edited by

        moon crops.jpg

        An update on the WIP:
        Which comp works better for you?

        I am very unsure about the color of this piece. I might end up doing a mono-color piece for now due to not having enough time to explore the color at this moment.

        Web: www.lixin.no
        IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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        • burvantill
          burvantill Moderator @xin li last edited by

          @xin-li i like the vertical format. #1

          Lisa Burvant
          www.lisaburvant.com
          Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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          • braden H
            braden H @xin li last edited by

            @xin-li My vote's for #1. It gives me a nice sense of height, which I think is necessary to make the moon comfortably in the sky 🙂

            Awesome work. I think it would look great mostly monotone with small spots for the characters and moon 🙂

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            • xin li
              xin li last edited by

              @burvantill @Braden-Hallett thank you for the feedback. Now I am ready to paint this piece :-).

              Web: www.lixin.no
              IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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              • peteolczyk
                peteolczyk @xin li last edited by

                @xin-li I agree with @Braden-Hallett i think monotone would work out really well. maybe adding a little colour to emphasise the places you want people’s eyes to bounce around.

                www.peteolczykillustrations.com

                www.instagram.com/pete_illustrations

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                • LauraA
                  LauraA SVS OG last edited by

                  I only just saw this, but really like the take on the prompt and agree that the vertical version is the way to go. Good luck with the finish!

                  Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/lauraintorino/
                  http://lauraaldersonart.com/

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                  • idid
                    idid @xin li last edited by idid

                    @xin-li Lovely concept! 1 works better. however, you may want to consider make the comp a little bit more dynamical. Right now this image has a tendency of being symmetric (a big trangle, with things distributed almost equally on its left and right) and thus being stable instead of dynamical. Change the position of the boy and objects in front of him should help. Shifting the position of moon a little bit may help, too, from my perspective.

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                    • xin li
                      xin li last edited by

                      @peteolczyk and @LauraA, thank you for the feedback.
                      @idid Definitely good point, I will see what I can do.

                      Really not sure if I will make it on time this month. But I have a lot of fun coming up with ideas for this prompt. If I run out of time, I will paint it in Jan :-).

                      Web: www.lixin.no
                      IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                        IanS last edited by

                        Comp 1 for me. It's looking great!

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                        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                          Definitely 1. The moons is just well framed in that one.

                          Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                          Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
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