February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!
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@Braden-Hallett Oh my gosh...A!
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@Laurel-Aylesworth Yup. I think A's gonna win it
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I'm gonna do this one as well as option 'A' since it's really really easy and fast (and I really like it)
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@Braden-Hallett I really love the idea of A. But I am sure whatever you decide on will be amazing as always.
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They’re all amazing!
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@Braden-Hallett I love love love option A! That is so clever, I've never seen anything like it before!
The umbrella idea is cool too. I do think it reads better when the night wraps around the umbrella. (Like your first post, rather than the second.)
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@Braden-Hallett ok A is really awesome but this really sells me on C as well. I am so glad you are doing both!
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I think A's the one to pursue, then
Thanks everyone for weighing in.Churning out option C. I'm gonna add either a toy truck in the bottom left or a plushy earth hanging in the window.
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@Braden-Hallett I can't help but see the girl as a pregnant woman looking out the window with a really bad denim skirt creating a tangent. It took me some study to realize its a blanket. Sorry! Blame it on my old eyes.
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@chrisaakins lol fair enough! I think minus the teddy bear may make it clearer
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@Braden-Hallett I also thought it was a woman leaning towards the window the first time I saw this image.
I think the shape of the blanket looks a bit like a woman's dress.I really love your concept, but there is something not working for me in this image: I think since you are choosing a very minimalistic style for this image, anything you included became very prominent. I am not entirely sure why there are a blanket and a toy truck in terms of the story. I would consider a mini spaceship, instead of the truck for example.
I would also work a bit more on the shape of the spaceship window. Right now the overall shape is a bit distracting for me. My brain is trying to figure out what those dark shapes are before I notice the main character.Hope this makes sense.
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@xin-li Absolutely makes sense!
It's amazing how important silhouette is and how often it's actually something entirely different unintentionally (I'm amazed I haven't accidentally silhouetted something naughty in my work yet. That I know of...)I was thinking blanky and jammies meant bedtime
The toy truck's just a toy that may make it into the bedroom. I like the idea of a kid living in space having a bedroom that's very normal and distinctly UN space-themed. Goodness knows if I were woken up early for spacewalks every bloody day I wouldn't want a toy spaceship.I think the original thumbnail worked, so I'll go back to that as well as another version where it's obviously a very standard messy bedroom.
Either way back to the drawing board!
Thank you for the feedback
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@Braden-Hallett i agree with your reasoning about the toy truck, but what about a futuristic dump truck? If there is space tech enough to live there, then we have had to have made improvements for our moon construction vehicles. Plus it’s an opportunity to design something cool.
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@burvantill ooo. 1 point for Lisa, 0 points for Braden.
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@burvantill said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:
@Braden-Hallett i agree with your reasoning about the toy truck, but what about a futuristic dump truck? If there is space tech enough to live there, then we have had to have made improvements for our moon construction vehicles. Plus it’s an opportunity to design something cool.
...opportunities to design cool things IS always fun. Points well taken
@chrisaakins said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:
@burvantill ooo. 1 point for Lisa, 0 points for Braden.
I keep my own score, good sir! I appear to be 19 widdershins past the final turnstyle and WELL ahead of the on-par rabbit seeker. At least until the 19th 1/55th half game.
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Makin' some small changes. I think the direction the balloons are travelling is more readable now. Also, tall chimneys are best chimneys
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@Braden-Hallett nice. This is going to be awesome. I think at first read the falling night could be read as hills. I’m sure that will change as it progresses. If it was a little transparent maybe near the top or sides it might help. Also I think with the one on the right where there are stars in the falling night and in the sky it helps with that transparent look . Such a cool idea
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@Coley said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:
nice. This is going to be awesome.
We'll see! This is usually where I screw up monumentally
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Super duper light sketch! I may skew the moon a bit so it looks like it's still settling into place
