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NIGHTFALL -Wip - Critique if you want.

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  • thousandwrecks
    thousandwrecks last edited by 25 Feb 2020, 20:30

    I really love this! I also can't wait to see the color, because I think this is only going to get more beautiful.

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    • romy
      romy last edited by 25 Feb 2020, 20:35

      Hehe, like it that the phoenix is called night -- nice oximoron-like setup, very fun! 👍 👏

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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @APHOTICMOTH last edited by 25 Feb 2020, 20:52

        @CLCanadyArts i think this is already looking perfect

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        • APHOTICMOTH
          APHOTICMOTH Moderator last edited by 26 Feb 2020, 13:21

          Oh, gosh.. Thank you everyone, all of these comments have given me some hope. ❤ Going to go for a mostly lineless look this time. If it goes well, I will be re-illustrating each of my older submissions in the same style with the critiques I've gotten on each.

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            teresaro last edited by teresaro 26 Feb 2020, 20:31 26 Feb 2020, 20:26

            @CLCanadyArts I just wanted to reinforce it looks amazing and I'm really looking forward to seeing the final work! I'm a total newbie but for sure, don't doubt yourself or hold back! We're our own biggest obstacle

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            • APHOTICMOTH
              APHOTICMOTH Moderator last edited by 26 Feb 2020, 23:14

              A lot left to do, but getting the basics worked out. She looks too old, going to refine the face. Thoughts on color choices?

              night phoenix spread wip 2.jpg

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              • chrisaakins
                chrisaakins @APHOTICMOTH last edited by chrisaakins 26 Feb 2020, 23:22 26 Feb 2020, 23:20

                @CLCanadyArts I think the colors are perfect! The smart use of complementary colors on her dress and saddle make her pop and yet are harmonious with the pinks and purples. Beautiful!

                Edit: The phoenix's lower leg looks a little lost/blurry.

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                • APHOTICMOTH
                  APHOTICMOTH Moderator @chrisaakins last edited by 26 Feb 2020, 23:25

                  @chrisaakins Thanks. Yet to flesh out the legs, or much anything really. They are definitely lost right now. Will be adding some shadowing to them. 😃 Glad you like the gold next to turquoise, bounced around on the dress color choice for awhile. I'll be adding some gold glint to the saddle and staff, hopefully without overbaking it.

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                  • carlianne
                    carlianne last edited by 27 Feb 2020, 00:25

                    I think it's overall working really well!

                    My only concern would be that the pheonix is getting a little lost with the value range? colorways.jpg

                    I just adjusted the bird, but you can play with it.

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                    • APHOTICMOTH
                      APHOTICMOTH Moderator @carlianne last edited by APHOTICMOTH 28 Feb 2020, 19:06 28 Feb 2020, 19:01

                      @carlianne I just saved a wip. Thoughts? I like what you did though. Thank you.

                      night phoenix spread 3.jpg
                      Also just saw your reply, was 2 days ago. Where have I been? Might have taken this your direction had I seen it.

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                      • APHOTICMOTH
                        APHOTICMOTH Moderator last edited by 28 Feb 2020, 19:05

                        The darker phoenix goes nicely with the hair too.

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                        • carlianne
                          carlianne @APHOTICMOTH last edited by 29 Feb 2020, 02:06

                          @CLCanadyArts I think it works now! If you want to change it you can try just doing a levels adjustment layer with a mask. But I think the values are reading ok 😊

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                          • Neha Rawat
                            Neha Rawat last edited by 29 Feb 2020, 04:30

                            @CLCanadyArts I love the colors!

                            I just have a few thoughts going on in my head. Feel free to ignore them please since I'm not too sure about them myself.

                            1. The background of the town - there is a distinct sharpness to the houses and a blurriness to all the trees (including the tress on the hills). Is that on purpose? Since all the other lines are sharp, this blurriness is throwing me a little off.

                            2. Maybe try omitting the blue glow where the phoenix overlaps the moon? I would think the glow wouldn't be seen against the bright white moon.

                            Your level of detailing is amazing! And I love the font selection and the way you've placed it in the starry night. Good luck! 😃

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                            • KathrynAdebayo
                              KathrynAdebayo last edited by 29 Feb 2020, 05:03

                              I love her hair!

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                              • APHOTICMOTH
                                APHOTICMOTH Moderator @Neha Rawat last edited by 29 Feb 2020, 13:35

                                @Neha-Rawat Good thoughts. I kept the glow as it's colored magic, but yeah, it probably would not be visable, or at least barely.

                                The blur was on purpose as the small trees/hills are far away, maybe I should lessen it a bit, and blur the far away houses a tad to make more sense.

                                Thank you!

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                                • APHOTICMOTH
                                  APHOTICMOTH Moderator last edited by 29 Feb 2020, 13:37

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