Is there something strange about the layout of this piece?
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@Rachel-Horne I like the wonky perspective in the cafe, so it didn't bother me at all!
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@sarahlash thanks
but the more I look the more I can see huge flaws with everything about this picture!! 
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@Rachel-Horne thank you so much for sharing your process. I think I have to create both time slot and mental space to start exploring with collage, and mixed media. I have been thinking about this for more than a year, and it is not happening for one reason or another. But the thoughts do not go away. So I think there is something in it for me.
I am curious. Are you sketching at all, or do you go with intuition from the start?
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@Rachel-Horne I agree. I think it’s because your eye wants to follow the line of the trees down to the girl in the window. But that’s where the picture cuts off. There’s lots above the focal point but the focal point itself looks incomplete. Just a matter of cropping. I love the style of it, though. It’s a cool piece. I don’t think anything else needs to change.
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@Rachel-Horne I think the same way about my paintings and lots of times I end up adding collage elements over my paintings. It feels like I’m using photoshop or something because I can work a piece and move things around till I get it where I want it.
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You have a very distinct style, so I just kept it loose to give an idea. The sidewalk cuts right into the building, and it does feel a bit odd that the cafe is cut off. So I extended the sidewalk, wrapped it around, shrunk the cafe, and added a little door knob. Darkened the bird on the bush to make it stand out against the grey. It's just a thought.
Edit: I lost the tree branch, that was a nice overlap. Didn't notice until now.
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@Rachel-Horne I love the wonkiness perspective! I've always wanted to be able to do that but never have. It just looks wrong whenever I try it.
@CLCanadyArts has done a wonderful paint over I think which covers most of the points everyone was making. The difference in perspective also looks like it belongs now.
I agree about the window muntin cutting across the ladies neck like that. Maybe the reposition that a little?
Loving the mixed media textures going on!
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@xin-li I know that feeling, when you just have an itch that you have to follow - I really look forward to seeing what you create. As for sketching, when I was painting on canvas I just tended to paint a bit intuitively, letting things coming together on their own but since I've started trying to go more towards illustration I've realised that the sketching phase is something that's non-negotiable but I don't probably spend enough time on it, hence the mess up on the above painting
Since trying to cross over to illustration, I've developed such a huge respect for illustrators - it is seriously hard work! -
@Pamela-Fraley thanks Pamela - I'm working on the re-framing now, the more I look, the more I see how the perspective is off! Thanks for your feedback
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@Pamela-Fraley Yes, I love that - it's like you can't really make any mistakes, well except for messing up the perspective maybe!
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@CLCanadyArts Wow, that's super cool, thanks so much. I have been reworking the sketches actually and the one I settled on looks a lot like this one, that's great and reassuring
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@Neha-Rawat Yes, I love the paint-over, that's definitely the direction I need to go in. And definitely the cut-off head thing, that needs fixing!! Thanks for the feedback and encouragement
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@Rachel-Horne said in Is there something strange about the layout of this piece?:
Hi everyone Hope you're all well in these very strange times. We're on total lockdown in France which is really weird. Still it's given me time to re-work the painting above. I completely changed everything as I just found and more fault with the original. I'm more happy with this one but would be happy for any feedback or thoughts
