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    Comic book cover WIP, Critiques encouraged!

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    • phoenix yip
      phoenix yip last edited by

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      Hey SVS! I made a new cover, I’ve seen all of your critiques and I completely agree, I hope this is better! Thank you all very much!

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      • Eelwick
        Eelwick last edited by

        This composition works and reads much better!

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        • phoenix yip
          phoenix yip @Eelwick last edited by

          @Eelwick alright! Thanks a lot!

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          • phoenix yip
            phoenix yip @Eelwick last edited by

            @Eelwick 5E15DB44-C21A-4FBA-8E4B-89F111170B10.png I added some and changed some, is it too busy? Do you like the other one better?

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            • Jacy13
              Jacy13 @phoenix yip last edited by

              @phoenix-yip This looks really cool! This cover has a lot more dynamism and clarity in composition than the last rendition. Great improvement! 🙂

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              • Neha Rawat
                Neha Rawat last edited by

                @phoenix-yip The second version of the cover is so much better! Great work!

                I think I'm leaning more towards the version with the linework in the clouds since it goes with the overall look, but reduce the boldness of the lines coz you don't want it to be overpowering the characters.

                A few suggestions I have:

                • I'm guessing "Duel of the Fates" is the subtitle, so I think it could be made a little more prominent.
                • You could consider omitting "written & illustrated by". If there's only one person's name mentioned on the cover, I feel it's sort of implicit that they've created the whole book. It would also give you more space to make your name more prominent.
                • I can't help but notice that the little dude's head is right up there in the crotch of the giant dude 😅 Either make him a little bigger or a little smaller.

                Overall, very well done!

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                • phoenix yip
                  phoenix yip @Neha Rawat last edited by

                  @Neha-Rawat thanks! Yeah the crotch things a little awkward I agree 😂

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                  • phoenix yip
                    phoenix yip @Neha Rawat last edited by

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                    How’s this look? Do you like the clouds better and is the crotch thing less awkward? 😂 also how’s the subtitle? I changed it

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                    • Neha Rawat
                      Neha Rawat last edited by

                      Much better! 😃 I really like it!

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                      • carlianne
                        carlianne last edited by

                        You made amazing improvements!! I really like this new cover compared to the old one. My only comment is I think you should still say "by pheonix yip" and maybe less kearning on that so it's easier to read. Also, maybe adjust the cloud shape around 'Battle" so it overlaps with the letters just once. It's getting hard to read there too.

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