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    • Valerie Light
      Valerie Light last edited by

      @Asyas_illos You were absolutely right it was way too busy.
      Last night I re-watched the December yeti character design critique arena, which really helped me see some examples of how to clean up my design and make things more clear and simple. You all do some inspiring work.

      Here's a value study sketch of my updated design.
      One thing I want to address is how her O2 tank and her backpack fit on her back, because I'm not sure that's reading clearly right now. Also need a few more tries to get the turtle to have a non-sedated facial expression. What else needs clarification as I finalize my line drawing? 3.14.21 traveler.jpeg

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos last edited by

        Wow that’s much better I love it!

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          bridgetbick last edited by

          These look great! I love the turtle, so cool great idea

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          • Jacy13
            Jacy13 @Valerie Light last edited by

            @Valerie-Light This character is too cool and unique! I love the whole thing, especially the turtle! The character looks pretty consistent to me.

            As far as the O2 tank and the back pack go; maybe make a strap that goes over the tank and is connected to the backpack would make it feel more cohesive? Make it like a feature of the backpack so that it is connected? A backpack specially made for space travel, haha 🙂

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            • Kim Rosenlof
              Kim Rosenlof @Valerie Light last edited by

              @Valerie-Light This definitely looks better! Good job!

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              • ruth
                ruth last edited by

                This looks great! Love the story and your character, she's got so much personality!

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                • lizardillo
                  lizardillo last edited by

                  Your expressions have so much life. This is a real original idea. Also now the goblins in the prompt would 'space goblins' which seems really exciting. I like her sitting down, helmet off, having a break.

                  Could the O2 tanks be in the centre, like a diver, and have attatchments on them such as pockets or bags with various items in

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                  • Valerie Light
                    Valerie Light last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos @bridgetbick @Kim-Rosenlof @ruth Thank you all very much for the encouragement! This is very exciting.
                    @Jacy13 @lizardillo thanks for the ideas on the o2 tank. My main trouble is that I need it to be on her back without her pack, when she's riding the turtle. Though I really like the idea of building her a pack that incorporates the tank! I'll play around with it.

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                    • HeatherBouteneff
                      HeatherBouteneff last edited by

                      This is awesome, I especially love her space turtle! My daughter's name is Mira too so great name ❤

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                      • Valerie Light
                        Valerie Light @HeatherBouteneff last edited by

                        @HeatherBouteneff Oh awesome! Let me know if I get the official Mira seal of approval from her!

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