Star - Feedback Kindly Requested

[jenn]

@jeremy-ross I have an idea: maybe you could try pulling the focus outward and show a little bit of the girl in the foreground, maybe in silhouette. That might clarify the concept that the star is looking into her window, and bounce the viewer's eye around the image a little. The star would still be the focal point. It has a very sweet expression, and of course the warm glow draws the eye immediately.

[Jeremy Ross]

Great idea @jenn, will give it a shot!

[Jeremy Ross]

Pulling the camera back; does this look better?

[Asyas_illos]

@jeremy-ross oh yah! That’s way better! Nice!

[Jeremy Ross]

Thanks @asyas_illos! Look forward to coloring this one this week.

[TessaW]

I really like the zoomed out view. I just wonder if the starfish poster might be distracting? Will people think the star outside is a starfish too? Maybe make it a regular star poster? It might not matter, but it just gave me pause.

[Jeremy Ross]

Thanks @tessaw, great point!

Maybe “Wish upon a Star”, which is why the star is visiting to grant her a wish?

[Jeremy Ross]

Finally found time this weekend to color it.

Appreciate everyone’s feedback!

[Norman Morana]

@jeremy-ross This is awesome, your values in the redo are handled much much better. You have some good textures going, too!

[carlianne]

@jeremy-ross really really cute! I'm wondering if a little rim light on her hair might help the girl pop a little. But you might also want to watch out for the tangent of the ball tip on the bed is having with her hair.

The color and values are really nice and the girl and star are both very cute

[Jeremy Ross]

Thank you @norman-morana!

[Jeremy Ross]

Hi @carlianne, good catch on the tangent, I meant to fix that sooner. I’ll give it a tweak and add a little extra rim lighting to her hair.

Thank you!

[Jeremy Ross]

Hi @carlianne, moved the bed frame ball up to avoid tangent and slapped on some rim lighting on the girl’s hair.

Thanks again for the feedback!