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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @lidia-ull last edited by

      @lidia-ull thanks for the feedback! I’m going to work the border a bit more and see if I can pull something off.👍🏼

      Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
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      • Miriam
        Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by

        @Asyas_illos I like the changes so far. My suggestion for the border is to cut out the pieces right next to the donkey (under the nose, next to the hoof, & beside the ear). I think that will simplify it and keep it from competing with the character.

        I think the title is a little long. Consider shortening it to "Donkey is NOT a Piñata!" It will come out in the story that it's a tiny donkey & that's the reason people think it's a piñata.

        Good luck with all your story ideas!

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

          Ok I thinned out the border and fixed his expression also removed the yellow that was in the background. I tried moving my name around and just have my name but to me it just didn’t look right. So this is where it’s at currently I’m gonna let sit for a while while continue to work on the story and sketches. Thank you @Miriam for your suggestions, but I really like the title as it is for now, we’ll see when I come back to it again later. Thanks for the feedback everyone!
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          https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos last edited by

            Wondering what you guys think about this lighting? Is it too much? To chaotic, busy?
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            Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
            www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
            https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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            • kirsten-mcg
              kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos I love scenes like this where the same character is shown multiple times to crate movement! I'm curious what it would look like if you reduced the saturation of the lights a little, but left Alice and the other objects more saturated. I can't decide if its too much or not, and I feel like looking at two versions side by side would help!

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                @kirsten-mcg I didn’t do a toned down version yet but I have this alternative lighting too
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                https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos last edited by

                  Ok made some side by side comps thoughts?
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                  • Miriam
                    Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos I like #1

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                    • KevinTreaccar
                      KevinTreaccar @Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @Asyas_illos I agree on preferring the left side (1 and 2). I could just be missing the light source, but I'm just not sure where the purple light is coming from. There's nothing distracting on 1. Love the image overall.

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                      • Asyas_illos
                        Asyas_illos @KevinTreaccar last edited by

                        @KevinTreaccar thanks for the feedback! my mind was just playing off the scene where she’s falling and there are flashing colors but they never came any specific light source.

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                        • kayleenartlover
                          kayleenartlover @Asyas_illos last edited by

                          @Asyas_illos number 2, the middle right one, I think has just the right amount of colored lighting

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                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos @kayleenartlover last edited by

                            Thanks @kayleenartlover 😊

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                            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Asyas_illos last edited by

                              @Asyas_illos hi! i think the first lighting is perfect. it's psychedelic and imo is perfect for Alice in Wonderland

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                                @Nyrryl-Cadiz thanks for the feedback!

                                Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
                                www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
                                https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos last edited by

                                  Hey guys I’ve been working on setting up a website using wix. It’s been frustrating! But I think I’ve got it I plan on switching to a personal domain soon, but for now just borrowing the wix site one. It’s VERY simple. I’d like some feedback on it please, accessibility, design, illustrations I should remove or rearrange, etc . Thanks guys😊

                                  https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

                                  Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
                                  www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
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                                  • AngelinaKizz
                                    AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    @Asyas_illos great job! I really struggled with learning how to builds mine through Wordpress, and now that I understand what I’m doing, it’s much easier to work with. I think the one thing I would vary up, is at the bottom you have a cluster of black and white images. I think I would shift them to be sprinkled throughout the colored pieces.

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                                    • Asyas_illos
                                      Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                      @AngelinaKizz awesome thanks! Yes I’m not very good with computers in general and I was creating it with my iPad, so let’s just say it was my fifth attempt. 😂

                                      Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
                                      www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
                                      https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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                                      • AngelinaKizz
                                        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                        @Asyas_illos oh man, me either! I find that it's easier going through the web browser rather than the app for WordPress. The app I was ripping my hair out. Are you using an app?

                                        www.evarartistry.com
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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by Asyas_illos

                                          @AngelinaKizz no it was web based still a major pain. I tried at first with square space only to find it wasn’t compatible with my iPad and I could not transfer any of my pictures, good grief!

                                          Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
                                          www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
                                          https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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                                          • AngelinaKizz
                                            AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                            @Asyas_illos brutal!!! You've done a great job so far though

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